Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

To travel abroad is many people dream, nowadays. I don't think so travelers only like to visit places in their own country. Public are like to explore and spend time in different regions. To travel inside country shows love towards their nation whereas to visit other gives different experience and knowledge.

There are several reasons that many families only plan their holidays inside country. There might be a lack of days or some time financial capacity. For example, some guys want to visit out side their country however they don't have enough time to go and explore other country. Furthermore, many times human has threat of human. To meet unknowns at unknown place. This can scare person in new location.

Public influenced by social media, TV and publications to travel over country by seeing places with eye capturing views. Many don't care about cost, sometimes they take loans to travel. Some have hobbies to explore new places, their culture and traditions. For instance, Few are doing these kind of activities to post it on social media and earn money by sharing knowledge and pictures. On the other hand, some are doing these to gather some knowledge as well as for some research. Additionally, some times employers sponsored to travel other region for vacations.

I am not agree on statement that people will stop visiting foreign country for there vacations and would like to explore their own in future. There might be some reasons behind this which influence people to visit other country for holidays.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both domestic and international travel. However, the position is not consistently clear throughout the essay. While you state you disagree with the prompt in the final paragraph, the body paragraphs present arguments for both sides without a strong, unified stance. The ideas are relevant but remain somewhat under-developed; for instance, the point about 'threat of human' is vague and lacks sufficient explanation to support the argument effectively. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that directly supports your overall position, and provide more specific, logical examples to flesh out your arguments.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical or inaccurate, such as the transition 'Furthermore, many times human has threat of human.' Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the logical flow between sentences. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'nevertheless', 'in addition') and ensure that each sentence flows naturally from the previous one to create a more cohesive argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary range is limited and often repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'eye capturing views' (instead of 'eye-catching' or 'breathtaking') and 'employers sponsored to travel' (instead of 'employers sponsor travel'). Some phrases are awkward, such as 'Public are like to explore'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of precision and the reliance on basic vocabulary prevent a higher score. You should aim to learn collocations—words that naturally go together—and practice using more academic vocabulary to express your ideas with greater accuracy and sophistication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('Public are like', 'human has threat'), article usage ('to visit out side their country'), and sentence fragments or awkward phrasing ('To travel abroad is many people dream'). While these errors do not completely prevent communication, they are frequent enough to cause difficulty for the reader. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions and articles, before attempting more complex structures.

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