Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Some people believe that more individuals will prefer their home country for vacations rather than traveling overseas for their holidays. I completely disagree with the given statement. In my perspective majority of public will choose other nations to travel. I will explain the reasons in the upcoming paragraphs of this essay.

To begin with, globalization is one of the biggest reasons that why people are more comfortable to travel abroad for their leisure time. Because of the access of social media people are more aware about the tourist destinations in other countries and wanted to explore those places. Moreover, Youngsters are more adaptive at present as compared to our old generations they are always ready to try new things such as diverse food and culture etcetera. What is more they are more influenced by western cultures and broad minded. Furthermore, most of the social media influencers are visiting to other regions and making vlogs about it as a result, ample amount of masses are making plan to visit other places for their holidays which are not in their own country.

On the contrary, some people will choose to go on vacation in their own country but they might be the one who are already living in abroad for their studies and work. For example, most of my friends and relatives who are living in Canada and America are visiting India to spend their free time because they wanted to take break from their busy schedules. Our elderly generation would also choose their own country. However, in future majority of public will choose foreign countries for their holiday trip. One of the reasons, to increase this trend is that most of the multinational companies are providing international holiday trips to their employees. What is more, other countries are also providing affordable holiday packages to attract more tourists from other countries. Hence, all these reasons validate that more individuals would choose foreign trips for their holidays.

In conclusion, majority of masses especially our youth would prefer to visit other nations for their holidays whereas, those who are more comfortable in their own country and living abroad may choose their own nation to spend their free and quality time with their family.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The essay addresses the prompt clearly and maintains a consistent position throughout. The arguments regarding globalization, social media influence, and corporate incentives are relevant and well-supported. However, the development of the counter-argument is slightly repetitive, and some points, such as the mention of 'multinational companies,' could have been expanded with more specific detail to reach a higher band. The response is well-structured, and the main ideas are clearly presented, meeting the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Cohesive devices such as 'To begin with,' 'Moreover,' 'On the contrary,' and 'In conclusion' are used to guide the reader. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions feel slightly forced. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate distinct ideas. While the progression of ideas is generally clear, the referencing could be more precise in places to improve the overall cohesion of the argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the writer to express ideas clearly. There are attempts to use less common items like 'globalization,' 'adaptive,' and 'multinational,' which is positive. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'majority of public' (should be 'the majority of the public') and 'living in abroad' (should be 'living abroad'). The use of 'ample amount of masses' is also slightly unnatural. Expanding the range of vocabulary and focusing on more precise collocations would improve the score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('the' is often missing or misused) and preposition usage. For example, 'reasons that why' is grammatically incorrect, and 'visiting to other regions' should simply be 'visiting other regions.' Punctuation is generally functional, but there are some run-on sentences and minor errors in subject-verb agreement. These errors do not impede communication, but they prevent the essay from reaching a higher band.

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