Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is often predicted that people will prefer to travel within their own nation rather than traveling international to spend their holidays. However, I disagree with this prediction because of human desire to explore unknown and ease of air-travel along with introduction of overseas travel packages.

To commence with, humans have an in-built curiosity to explore unvisited places in order to broaden their horizons. This means that traveling to new places gives them a unique experience which they don not get when they travel locally to limited familiar spots. Since visiting unknown places satisfies their quest to explore, people presently travel abroad for holidays and it is certain that this trend will persist in coming times as well. For instance, a statistics published by Air Canada on purpose of travel illustrated more than half of the international air flights are taken for holiday purposes.

Another contributing factor is the ease of overseas air travel in present times and definitely in future. This is because multiple airlines companies offer cheaper international air flights and all-inclusive international holiday packages to their clients in order to survive the fierce competition. As a result, travelling by plane to foreign hot spots has become cheaper and convenient.

In conclusion, I maintain my stance on disagreement that more people will choose to go on domestic holiday instead of international because I believe the otherwise, owing to natural human instinct to explore unknown and flexibility in overseas air travel.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt and maintains a clear position throughout. However, the essay is under the 250-word minimum, which limits the depth of the arguments provided. While the ideas are relevant, they are somewhat underdeveloped; for instance, the example regarding Air Canada is a bit generic and could have been expanded to better support the argument. Because the response is under-length, it fails to fully develop the ideas to the extent required for a higher band, resulting in a penalty for task achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Cohesive devices such as 'To commence with', 'For instance', and 'In conclusion' are used to guide the reader. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical, and the referencing could be more sophisticated. The paragraphing is appropriate, and the progression of ideas is generally easy to follow, though the brevity of the essay makes the overall structure feel slightly thin.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task. You use some good collocations like 'broaden their horizons' and 'fierce competition'. However, there are some minor inaccuracies and awkward phrasing, such as 'traveling international' (should be 'internationally') and 'statistics published... illustrated' (should be 'a statistic' or 'data'). The range is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, but it lacks the variety and precision of more advanced lexical choices that would elevate the score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'don not' (typo), 'a statistics' (article error), and 'I believe the otherwise' (incorrect usage). While these errors do not significantly impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and adverbs. The sentence structures are functional but lack the consistent accuracy required for a band 7.

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