Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
holidays are important for relax and reduce their monotny from their work. In the future, mostly people will choose to go for vacations in thier own nation rather than travel to abroab. I will partially agree with this satemnet which i will discuss in the upcoming paragraphns of this eassay and provide relevent conclussion at the end.
First and the foremost point is miss their family members because mostly youngsters prefer to go abroad for higher studies or jobs they far away from thier family members when they complete their stiudies or get vaccations from thier work they go back to thier own nation to spend time with them and they do get togerther after long time share there feelings with each othersowing to this they prefer to thier own country. For example, as i am a student from inida i miss my family all time if i get holidays my first priority is going to own nation and spend my holidays with them and create memories.
on the other hand, if people go to abroab in thier holidays they can inhance their knowledge related to culture and traditions ans also western wear. but they face problms related to langugae barrieers they face difficulites related to communication with others and they do not know how to order food so that s way they prefer to go their own nation to meet theie kith and kins.
Conclussion, both have their own pros and cons but i will go to pros if they spend thier holdays with thier family in their own nation they feel better and reduce strees as well as create fruitful memories with them.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by taking a partially agreeable position. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat repetitive. While you mention the desire to visit family and the challenges of traveling abroad, the arguments lack depth and specific supporting evidence beyond a personal anecdote. The conclusion is brief and does not fully synthesize the points made. To improve, ensure that each body paragraph focuses on a distinct, well-developed argument that directly supports your thesis, and avoid over-generalizing about the reasons people choose domestic travel.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between ideas is often mechanical or disjointed. You use some basic cohesive devices like 'First and the foremost' and 'on the other hand', but these are sometimes used incorrectly or lack variety. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the transition between sentences feels abrupt. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider range of linking words and ensure that each sentence logically follows the previous one to create a smoother progression of ideas throughout the essay.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'monotny', 'abroab', 'satemnet', 'relevent', 'inhance', and 'kith and kins'. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary, the errors are frequent enough to occasionally distract the reader. To improve, focus on mastering the spelling of common academic words and try to incorporate more precise synonyms to avoid repeating basic terms like 'holidays' and 'nation' throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent errors in grammar, punctuation, and sentence construction. Issues include missing articles, incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'for relax'), and run-on sentences. Complex structures are attempted but are often inaccurate, which hinders the clarity of your message. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles. Proofreading for punctuation and basic grammatical consistency will significantly improve the readability of your writing.
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