Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
In the upcoming era, many people would prefer to visit their home country rather than going to a foreign place for vacation. I disagree with the given notion as it can provide an opportunity to visit famous attractions and experience different culture that are elaborated in the given paragraphs.
One of the main reason for people to visit a different country is to witness famous tourist attraction of a particular country that has it's own vibe and it can not be experienced at another place. For example, the experience of fascinating tropical beaches of Goa, India can not be replaced by cold places of Canada. People from all over the world visit Goa for this experience. Another reason could be exploring and living a different culture can be possible by visiting that place. For example, if someone wants to know about Japanese cuisine, culture and architecture, they must visit Japan.
However, it can not be denied that going on a holiday in own can be affordable and convenient. To elaborate, one do not need to wait for months for the visa. Additionally, visitors do not need to pay for extra expenses such as paying for customs which make it cost effective.
In conclusion, the typical reasons behind international tourism includes exploring a foreign place and experiencing a different culture are there to witness the beauty of nature but the cost effectiveness and conveniency of going to home town can never be neglected.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position against the idea that domestic tourism will replace international travel. However, the essay falls short of the 250-word minimum requirement, which limits the depth of development. While the main arguments regarding cultural exploration and convenience are relevant, they are somewhat underdeveloped. The conclusion is a bit repetitive and does not fully synthesize the arguments presented. To improve, you should expand on your examples and ensure that your supporting points are more thoroughly explained to meet the length requirement and provide a more comprehensive discussion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. You use some cohesive devices such as 'One of the main reasons', 'For example', and 'However' to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions feel abrupt. The referencing is generally clear, but the overall progression could be smoother. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that the relationship between your ideas is more explicitly stated, particularly when transitioning between the body paragraphs and the conclusion.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'attractions', 'architecture', and 'cost-effective'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'going on a holiday in own' (should be 'in one's own country') and 'conveniency' (the correct noun is 'convenience'). The vocabulary is generally functional but lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands. To improve, focus on learning collocations and using more sophisticated synonyms to express your ideas with greater nuance and accuracy.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'one of the main reason' (should be 'reasons'), 'it's own vibe' (should be 'its'), and 'one do not need' (should be 'one does not need'). Punctuation is also inconsistent in places. These errors do not significantly impede communication, but they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. To improve, pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement and the correct use of possessive pronouns.
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