Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In my opinion people nowadays people like to visit abroad places rather than own country . Here some reason i will describe about it

First and main reason is that people love to know about abroad culture and people lifestyles and they also want to follow similar way in their own life . Realistically people would like to learn more different languages and their infrastructure and way of modern living . I can see people are more visit in foreigh countries to eat their food and like to travel in famous places rather than own country places.

Secondly most of the humans are active on social media which is taking important role to divert people to visit abroad countries. For example one of my friend is influencer so he often travel different countries to make short videos and showing other countries culture forthere my other friends watched his videos and also planning to visit there. Thirdly if you will visit different countries you will get improvement in your daily lifesyle and manage your work life and social life as well .

But there are always some probs and corns here it is because of modern life peole sometimes forget your roots and culture which is also impotant in your life that what you are ! If you don’t know about your culture so future families will never know what they are . And its also impact to your historical monument and infrastructure and goverment too .

In my opinoin its good to go on holidays sometime to abroad

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the trend of international travel, but the position is somewhat contradictory. While you initially suggest people prefer abroad, the essay lacks a clear, consistent stance on whether this trend will continue or if domestic tourism will prevail. The ideas are relevant, such as the influence of social media and the desire for cultural exchange, but they are under-developed. For instance, the point about 'improving daily lifestyle' is vague and lacks specific explanation. To improve, ensure you clearly state your opinion in the introduction and provide more detailed, logical support for each main point throughout the body paragraphs.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as 'forthere' and 'But there are always some probs and corns here'. The progression of ideas is occasionally disjointed, particularly in the transition between the benefits of travel and the negative impacts on culture. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to track the subject of certain sentences. To achieve a higher band, focus on using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'on the other hand') more naturally to connect your ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'people', 'visit', and 'countries'. There are several instances of incorrect word choice and non-standard phrasing, such as 'abroad places', 'probs and corns', and 'impotant'. Some spelling errors, such as 'foreigh', 'opinoin', and 'goverment', are also present. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of precision and the reliance on simple vocabulary restrict the score. You should aim to incorporate more topic-specific vocabulary related to tourism, culture, and globalization to demonstrate a broader range of lexical control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures. While there are attempts at complex sentences, they are often marred by grammatical errors, such as 'I can see people are more visit in foreigh countries' and 'its also impact to your historical monument'. Punctuation is inconsistent, with missing commas and incorrect spacing. Subject-verb agreement and article usage are frequent areas of error. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like missing 's' on plurals or incorrect verb tenses. Increasing the variety of complex structures will also help improve your score.

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