Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Future is very unpredictable. Owing to technology, every want to know anything what is happing all around the world . Majority of people will decided to spent time in their home country than travel to international. I am partially agree with this statement . I will shed light in the upcoming paragraphs.
To commence, life is very busy in today,s. They have no time for their loved ones. Therefore, they just want to spent time in their own country . Some people are hectic in their schedules even they do not go anywhere so firstly they have to wonder first their own country. Moreover , they get chance to meet new people and gather knowledge by talking with them . It will good for their future also .
On the other hand , I believe that they have a good opportunity by travelling to abrode . They will enhance many thing like meet new individuals, get new ideas, modern living standers, how to live better life and so on . Whereas, they will spent quality time with their family’s and friends. Also get chance to free from work and after holiday can make refresh to start work again.
In my opinion, before putting my pen down I would say that you can choose by their own interest where you want to spend holiday in their country and abrode . I ponder that wondering abrode will help them in their better future.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt but fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you present a position, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat repetitive. For example, the arguments regarding 'meeting new people' are mentioned in both body paragraphs without significant extension or depth. To improve, you should ensure each point is fully supported with specific examples or logical explanations. Additionally, the conclusion is somewhat vague and does not clearly restate your position in a way that synthesizes the arguments provided. Expanding your analysis of why domestic tourism might be preferred over international travel would help achieve a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression of ideas is often hindered by awkward phrasing and a lack of clear cohesive devices. Transitions like 'To commence' and 'Moreover' are used, but the connections between sentences are sometimes mechanical or unclear. For instance, the transition from discussing domestic travel to international travel in the second paragraph is abrupt. Furthermore, the use of referencing is occasionally confusing, such as the pronoun usage in 'They have no time' without a clear antecedent. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence will enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'good', 'new', and 'time', which restricts your ability to express complex ideas precisely. There are also several instances of incorrect word choice and spelling errors, such as 'abrode' (abroad), 'standers' (standards), and 'happing' (happening). These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. To reach a higher band, you should aim to incorporate a wider range of topic-specific vocabulary related to tourism and lifestyle, and pay closer attention to spelling and collocations. For example, instead of 'enhance many thing', you could use 'broaden one's horizons' or 'gain cultural insights'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that affect clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('every want to know', 'Majority of people will decided'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are simple or contain errors that make them difficult to follow, such as 'It will good for their future also'. While there is an attempt at complex structures, they are often inaccurate, which limits your ability to demonstrate control over a wide range of grammar. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like verb tense consistency and pluralization will significantly improve your accuracy.
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