Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In this contemorary era, numerous individuals love to go in abroad for enjoying their holidays instead of going in their native country.draft I am agree with this statement.Draft of this essay would disscuss my views in subsequent paragraph before reaching on conclusion.
first and foremost, it becomes fashion to visite other
countries for enjoying their spire time. First of all, they become new friend in abroad because masses shear alots of feeling with that countries`s native people.Owing to this , they have well communication skill which is palying significant role in our life. moreover,they adopt the cultures of other countries because they spend majority of time with each other.due to this,they donot face any difficulties with each other which help to build well realations
On the other hand, individuals need to spend their holidays in their country instead of going in foreign countries. further more, they forget their native's culture as well as triditions as they adopt other country's culture very fast .because of this ,they forget their roots which is very harmful for their future
In conclusion,no doubt individuals like to go abroad in their holidays, but i deem that, maases have to spend their holidays in own country as it saves alot of individuals's money
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the trend of domestic versus international travel. However, the essay is significantly under the 250-word minimum, which limits the development of ideas. While a position is stated, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack specific examples or depth. The conclusion is brief and does not fully synthesize the points made. To improve, you must expand on your arguments with concrete examples and ensure you meet the word count requirement to allow for a more comprehensive exploration of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is often disrupted by awkward phrasing and limited use of cohesive devices. While some transition words like 'moreover' and 'on the other hand' are used, they are occasionally misused or placed in contexts that make the progression of ideas feel mechanical. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the overall structure lacks the sophistication required for higher bands. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, with frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'contemorary', 'visite', 'spire time', and 'realations'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas precisely. Many phrases are non-idiomatic, such as 'it becomes fashion' or 'masses shear alots of feeling'. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning collocations and expanding your range of academic vocabulary, while also paying closer attention to spelling and word formation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('they become new friend'), articles, and sentence structure. The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors that can impede readability. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of apostrophes and commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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