Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Tourism is really important pillar of development in a country because it contributes to the economy and also uplifts lifestyle of local vendors.In between these few individuals thinks that in upcoming days more individuals will prefer their own nation over travelling overseas while choosing destination for vacation. I partially agree with this viewpoint and will support my reasoning with relevant examples in further paragraphs.

To advocate this prediction many developing nations are promoting invest in local policies. To elaborate, governments of many countries believe that citizens can promote local business and help local tourists place maintain if they choose local tourism over international trips.in short money remains under local economy rather than leaving own nation. For example, India is practicing it since 2018 as a result hike of 3 % in tourism industry is reported.

On the other hand, if we talk about developed countries citizens have good life style and better pocket size so they prefer to go on international trips. To explain it, in developed nations individuals prefer to have premium experience on vacations. They try to go on more remote areas where they can have cutoff from stressful and hectic life of metro cities. The other reason why I stand with the given prediction is better flight connectivity, compared to past many countries over the globe has opened their doors for global travellers. They made visa process and flight connections really simple and convenient. For example, it was really hard to get tourist visa of Spain and they were hesitant to open door for travellers but after government change they now know the vital role of tourism and now running advertisements to promote it.

To conclude, in near future we might see people shift towards going abroad for holidays in developed countries due to better income but in developing nations citizen might choose local travels because of patriotism towards local communities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both sides of the argument, though the position is somewhat contradictory. You state you 'partially agree' with the prediction that people will travel locally, yet your conclusion suggests a split based on economic development. The ideas are relevant, such as the economic benefits of local tourism and the convenience of international travel, but the development is occasionally thin. For instance, the example of India is a good start but lacks depth. To improve, ensure your position is clearly maintained throughout the essay and that each supporting point is fully explained with a clear link back to the prompt's core question regarding future trends.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, each with a clear focus. You use some cohesive devices like 'To elaborate', 'On the other hand', and 'To conclude' to guide the reader. However, some transitions are mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'In between these few individuals thinks that'. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear; for example, 'help local tourists place maintain' is grammatically confusing and disrupts the flow. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that sentences connect smoothly will help elevate your score in this criterion.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'uplifts', 'advocate', 'remote areas', and 'vital role'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and awkward collocations, such as 'promoting invest in local policies' (should be 'investment') and 'better pocket size' (an unnatural idiom). There are also minor errors in word formation, such as 'tourists place maintain'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more natural collocations and ensuring that your vocabulary is used with greater precision to convey your ideas more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('the' economy, 'the' tourism industry), subject-verb agreement ('individuals thinks'), and prepositions. For example, 'compared to past many countries over the globe has opened' contains multiple errors in structure and agreement. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods in some places. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy and ensuring that your complex structures are formed correctly to avoid impeding the reader's understanding.

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