Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
In this modern society where every this is changing at very fast pace but the one thing that has not been changed is the urge of exploring the world as people love to see around the glove and experience different cultures. I partially agree with statement which will be discussed in the upcoming paragraph.
First and foremost, there are very minimal chances that the international tourism will stop in the future as majority of individuals in this world enjoy spending their vacation in a foreign country, as this helps them to get an escape from their daily chores. Also there are people who live their lives by experiencing different cultures, for instance a study in 2022 revealed that 75% of the world population prefers to travel abroad for holidays rather than spending it in their home country.
Secondly, there are also a grey area where people can stop going abroad for holidays, as there is a lot of racism faced by many individuals while traveling on the basis on how they look or speak.Due to this situation many people gets so hurt by these incidents that they prefer not to travel again. On the other hand countries are also closing their borders for the foreign visitors due to many reasons like spilling litter, harassing laws etcetera.
In conclusion, I would like to state that there are very few chances that foreign tourism fades away in the future due to the destination choices of the individuals and their will to see the world.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses the prompt by taking a partially agreeable stance. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention international tourism and the reasons for its persistence, the counter-argument regarding domestic tourism is underdeveloped. The essay touches on racism and border closures as reasons for a potential shift, but these points are not fully explored in relation to the prompt's core question about the future of holiday choices. To improve, ensure that both sides of the argument are balanced and supported with more detailed reasoning or specific examples that directly relate to the trend of domestic versus international travel.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'First and foremost', 'Also', 'Secondly', and 'In conclusion' to signal the structure. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the logical progression within paragraphs could be smoother. For instance, the transition between the discussion of international tourism and the mention of racism feels abrupt. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'modern society', 'international tourism', and 'daily chores'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'see around the glove' (likely meant 'globe') and 'harassing laws'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your expression. To reach a higher band, focus on using more sophisticated vocabulary and ensuring that collocations are natural. Expanding your range to include more topic-specific terminology related to travel and tourism would also be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'every this is changing' (should be 'everything'), 'majority of individuals... enjoy' (should be 'the majority'), and 'many people gets' (should be 'get'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing after commas and periods. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall accuracy. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and proofreading for minor mechanical errors will help improve your score.
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