Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In the upcoming world most of the people will like to visit in their home country first rather than exploring foreign countries .

I strongly agree with the above statement as i believe that firstly we have to explore all our home country as it will help us to know about the historic places and our cultural beliefs .For instance , I belongs from Punjab ,India and from Sikh family in my culture there are lots of historic places to visit which tell me about my past and historic things .

Moreover ,exploring our own country or hometown will boost the independence and self confidence before going to foreign country .

Furthermore , by visiting in our own country it will helps us to know about the culture and beliefs and it helps us to connect with our ancestors and with our roots . For instance , India had twenty nine states and all of the had different communication languages and also their culture and beliefs are also different .It is very important to learn more about our own country as it will increase the knowledge and also boosts our productivity level .

To conclude the above paragraphs I strongly believe that prior we have to explore our own country or nation first than the foreign countries . It will help us to know about our culture , beliefs and also our past history . To explore foreign country is not bad option but on the priority basis explore our own nation .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of domestic tourism. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention cultural knowledge and confidence-building, the arguments are repetitive and lack depth. For instance, the point about India having twenty-nine states is a good start, but it is not fully linked back to why this makes domestic travel superior to international travel in a global context. To reach a higher band, you should provide more detailed explanations and perhaps consider counter-arguments to show a more balanced perspective, which would help in extending your ideas beyond simple assertions.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', and 'To conclude', which is positive. However, the progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by repetitive phrasing and awkward transitions. The connection between sentences is occasionally mechanical, and some ideas feel like a list rather than a cohesive argument. Improving the flow between sentences by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your main points clearly. You use some topic-specific vocabulary such as 'historic places', 'cultural beliefs', and 'ancestors'. However, the range is somewhat limited, and there are instances of word-choice errors, such as 'I belongs from Punjab' (should be 'I am from') and 'prior we have to explore' (should be 'we should prioritize exploring'). To improve, try to incorporate more sophisticated collocations and avoid repeating the same words (like 'country' and 'culture') too frequently throughout the essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('all of the had different communication languages'), article usage ('to explore foreign country'), and awkward phrasing ('In the upcoming world'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on basic sentence construction, specifically verb tenses and pluralization, will help you achieve greater accuracy. Try to proofread your work specifically for these common slips.

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