Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In future most off people select holy day in their own country no travel to another country. Now all off the persons select not own country in another countries. Per year above 1 lack peoples are migrate the another areas. I agree for the statement. Because grandparents living in own country and beautiful moments, nature. Super places for travelling its a very happy moments.
To being most of parents meet grand childrens no way to travel abrod, too money problm. But settiled people have seeing parents come our holiday back to own country. They were spend more time in that time. So the peoples are happy and that area presence is beautiful moments will arived. That parents happy to see the grand childrens the moment captured.
To embark beautiful place are in our country. Go to the one week travel for the family. It is the good moment in life. Travelling time stay in tent and cooking out side areas is life enjoy ment situation. Children are happy to that time. Some peoples first time moment, most of people one year or two year back to our area and enjoy the holy day moments.
Whole family happy to that moment. So in future most of people select only our areas and country. Children s are select next time same trips. That is the persons enjoy moment s. So i strongly agree with the star. Beautiful moments and happy time for our life. One life also enjoy and super memories are produce that moment.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position in favor of domestic tourism. However, the development of ideas is limited and often repetitive. While you mention reasons such as family reunions and the beauty of local travel, these points are not fully extended or supported with clear, logical arguments. The essay lacks a structured approach to the topic, and some parts are difficult to follow due to the lack of clarity in the reasoning. To improve, focus on providing specific, well-explained examples for each point rather than listing general ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure of these paragraphs is weak. There is a lack of logical progression between sentences, making it difficult for the reader to follow your train of thought. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'So' and 'That' to start or connect sentences. The referencing is often unclear, making it hard to identify what specific nouns are being referred to. Improving the use of linking words like 'consequently', 'furthermore', or 'in addition' would help create a better flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite basic and often inaccurate, which frequently impedes communication. There are numerous errors in word choice, such as 'holy day' instead of 'holiday', '1 lack' (likely meaning 'lakh'), and 'settiled' instead of 'settled'. The range of vocabulary is limited, and you rely on simple, repetitive phrasing. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary, including less common words and phrases, and ensure that your spelling and word choice are accurate enough to convey your meaning clearly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with frequent errors. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'In future most off people select holy day'). Many sentences are fragmented or lack a clear subject and verb, which makes the text difficult to read. Punctuation is also inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that each sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practicing the correct use of tenses and prepositions.
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