Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

This recent years, going abroad or traveling in your respective country gives us an argumentation which is better. I believe, travelling in your own land was better that going to other land.

Travelling in your own country was very beneficial not only for you but also to the native individuals who live their and to your government. First, for you as a tourist you will be beneficial in many ways. For example, you will learn their cultures and also their beliefs. Eating their local products and delicacies was important to. You can see also different tourist attraction and tourist spots on that certain location.

Second, for the native individuals there, they can create extra opportunity to earn some money thru becoming tour guide, cooking and making local delicacies and lastly renting their own place if ever.

Lastly, for the government, the tourism will boost if our locals travel to different places in our country. Thru social media they can convince other traveller to see and feel the beautiful places in this land.

Travelling on your country was less expensive than travelling abroad. Ialso believe, it is more safer to travel in your own country than other places because of todays terrorist attacks. And also you no longer need a passport to travel locally instead when you travel internationally you need a passport. Travelling also in your own place have many other possitive effect not only phisically, mentally, financiallyand emotionally. Itgives hope to other locals a new possitive perspective in life and better understanding outside their location.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favour of domestic tourism. The ideas are relevant, covering benefits for the individual, the local community, and the government. However, the development is somewhat superficial. For instance, the point about 'terrorist attacks' is a significant claim that lacks specific evidence or logical depth. While the main points are clear, the essay would benefit from more detailed examples or a more nuanced exploration of why domestic travel is becoming more popular, rather than just listing its advantages. The position is consistent, but the overall development remains at a basic level.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, each focusing on a specific stakeholder (the tourist, the native, the government). There is a clear progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive, relying heavily on simple transitions like 'First', 'Second', and 'Lastly'. Additionally, some referencing is unclear, such as the phrase 'live their' (should be 'there') and 'on that certain location'. While the paragraphing is functional, the flow between sentences could be improved to create a more natural, cohesive text.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are several instances of word-choice errors and non-standard collocations, such as 'gives us an argumentation' instead of 'presents an argument' and 'travelling in your own land' instead of 'domestic tourism'. Spelling errors are also present, such as 'possitive' and 'phisically'. While the meaning is generally clear, the limited range of vocabulary and frequent minor errors restrict the score in this criterion.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures. While there are attempts at complex sentences, they are often marred by grammatical inaccuracies, such as 'Travelling in your own country was very beneficial' (tense inconsistency) and 'it is more safer' (double comparative). Subject-verb agreement and preposition usage are inconsistent throughout the text. Punctuation is also problematic, particularly with missing commas in lists and run-on sentences. The frequency of these errors occasionally causes the reader to pause, though the overall message remains understandable.

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