Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

During this aura folks are changed alot, therefore some people belive to enjoy holidays in their own country and otherside a group of people say many individulas like to go abrod on holidays.i am agree this statement and upcoming paragraphs elevorate this topic.

To start with, there are some kind of people to focus on save money and a few old people who do not want to go out of country on holidays.These type of people like their own country and want to do much explore such as temple ,historical places and anymore.Example,60% folks intrusted to go warships place.

However,In this world too many adventure,therefore everyone have to look this advanture,so many people happy to go out of nation on holidays,such as Singapur ,Dubai,Thiland and others.Some of them go to alone and some with friends,famlies.They feeling good when thay look somthing diffrent and naturlly

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 144 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas, as the arguments are presented in a very superficial manner. While you attempt to address the prompt by discussing both domestic and international travel, the lack of depth and the failure to reach the required length mean that the task is only partially addressed. To improve, you must expand your arguments with specific examples and detailed explanations to ensure the response is fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often mechanical, such as 'To start with' and 'However'. Some transitions are confusing, such as 'otherside a group of people', which makes the flow of the argument difficult to follow. The referencing is also unclear at times, particularly in the second paragraph. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, central topic sentence that connects logically to the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'aura' instead of 'era', 'belive' instead of 'believe', 'abrod' instead of 'abroad', and 'warships' instead of 'worship'. These errors occasionally impede communication. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle to express more complex ideas accurately. To improve, you should focus on learning the correct spelling of common words and expanding your range of vocabulary related to travel and tourism, ensuring you use words in their correct context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often cause difficulty for the reader. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'everyone have to look'), incorrect sentence structures (e.g., 'i am agree this statement'), and missing articles or prepositions. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors. Punctuation is also inconsistent. To improve, you need to focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles. Practicing the formation of complex sentences will also help you move to a higher band.

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