Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
In the future, more individuals will select to go on vaction in their own country and not travel abroad on vaction. i am largely agree with this paragraphs i will discuss this notion upcoming paragraphs.
To commence with, travelling is cheaper than to another country. explicate, people do not need spend a lot of money on flights, visas or foreign currency. for example, a headline published by TURBIN NEWS paper in 2013 people need to go ne
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response is significantly under the required 250-word minimum, reaching only 77 words. Because the essay is incomplete and cuts off mid-sentence, it fails to address the task requirements. The position is stated, but the ideas are not developed, and the argument is not supported. The response is essentially a fragment rather than a complete essay. To improve, you must ensure you write at least 250 words, provide a clear introduction, develop at least two body paragraphs with supporting evidence, and include a conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text lacks logical progression due to its incomplete nature. While there is a basic attempt at paragraphing, the abrupt ending prevents any coherent flow of ideas. Cohesive devices are used in a very mechanical and limited way, such as 'To commence with'. The lack of a clear structure and the failure to complete the thought process make it difficult to follow the argument. You need to focus on using a wider range of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and supporting details.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains several errors, such as 'vaction' (vacation) and 'explicate' used incorrectly as a transition. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas effectively. There are also spelling errors like 'ne' at the end of the text. To improve, you should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to travel and tourism and ensure you proofread your work to correct basic spelling mistakes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the short text, such as 'i am largely agree' (I largely agree) and 'travelling is cheaper than to another country' (travelling is cheaper than travelling to another country). The sentence structures are simple and often contain errors in word order and verb usage. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing capital letters at the start of sentences. You need to work on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and consistent use of punctuation.
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