Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Undoubtedly, there has been much discussion revolving around spending holidays in own countries will be first preference in future, so majority of individuals believe traveling to own place is the best option to spend quality time with family and revive previous memories rather than going to travel.
analyzing the statement and explaining further, a number of reasons are there why people choose to travel their own place. The most precedence factor is
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under the required 250-word minimum, reaching only 72 words. Because the essay is incomplete and stops mid-sentence, it fails to address the prompt fully. The position is introduced, but there is no development of ideas, no supporting arguments, and no conclusion. According to the IELTS criteria, a response that is severely under-length and fails to develop the topic cannot progress beyond a Band 4.0 for Task Achievement. To improve, you must ensure you write at least 250 words, providing a clear introduction, two or three body paragraphs with supporting examples, and a concluding summary.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text is too brief to demonstrate a logical progression of ideas or effective paragraphing. While there is an attempt to use a cohesive phrase like 'analyzing the statement and explaining further', the essay ends abruptly before any cohesive structure can be established. There is no paragraphing present, which is a requirement for a standard IELTS essay. To achieve a higher score, you need to organize your thoughts into distinct paragraphs, each focusing on a specific argument, and use a variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in contrast') to connect your ideas smoothly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive. Phrases such as 'spending holidays in own countries' and 'traveling to own place' are somewhat awkward and lack the precision expected at higher levels. There is no evidence of less common lexical items or idiomatic language. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey a very simple message, but it is not flexible or precise enough to discuss the topic in depth. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific collocations related to tourism and travel, and try to avoid repeating the same words throughout your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors, such as the missing article in 'spending holidays in own countries' and the awkward phrasing 'most precedence factor'. The sentence structure is limited, and the text ends mid-sentence, which prevents a full assessment of your ability to use complex structures. While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of control over basic grammar and the incomplete nature of the sentences significantly impact the score. You should focus on mastering subject-verb agreement, the correct use of articles, and ensuring that your sentences are complete and grammatically sound.
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