Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-06
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
According to my point of view it’s depend upon person own choice and financial freedom
Many people like to explore world because they have enough money,time and apportunities as well.they love to explore whole world different kind of foods cultures and all .
This also provides them relaxation from stress and this way they spend quality time with family.people enjoy travelling via air and want to buy luxury item from diff Country
While there is a group of people who loved to Rome around there home country mostly in developing country like India . And those persons who wants to explore their own country and culture.some people goes in rural area and discover their own cultrure . I remembered in my childhood my father used to take us in my home town during my vacation and we have a lot of fun .it is also cheaper and budget friendly also
So cording to my experience it’s totally depend on person own choices ,hobbies,and financial freedom . As per my thinking I personally believed that first we should travel in our own country then after we should go outside for travelling because in countries like India there is so many place we can not travel each of them so first explore near by places then plan for holiday in abroad
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you address the prompt by discussing both domestic and international travel, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack depth. The position is somewhat clear, but the lack of elaboration on why people might prefer one over the other prevents a more nuanced discussion. To improve, you must expand on your points with more detailed explanations and specific examples to ensure the response is fully developed and meets the length requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a clear structure. Paragraphing is present but the logical flow between ideas is weak. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and paragraphs effectively; for example, the transition between the benefits of international travel and domestic travel is abrupt. The use of referencing is sometimes unclear, and the overall progression of ideas feels disjointed. To improve, focus on using transition words like 'furthermore', 'conversely', or 'consequently' to connect your thoughts and ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'explore' and 'travel'. There are several spelling errors, such as 'apportunities', 'cultrure', and 'cording', which distract the reader. The range of vocabulary is limited, and there is little attempt to use less common or more precise lexical items. To improve, try to incorporate a wider variety of synonyms and topic-specific vocabulary related to tourism and economics, and pay closer attention to spelling accuracy.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('it’s depend', 'some people goes'), article usage, and sentence fragments. The sentence structures are mostly simple, with limited attempts at complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with capitalization and spacing. These errors occasionally impede the flow of reading. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and practicing the use of complex structures like relative clauses or conditional sentences.
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