Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

it is believed that in upcoming time most of the masses will prefer to spend their vacations in their own nation instead of travelling to another countries. this essay agree with this notion because it will save their money and they can send their time with their family and friends.

First of all, as we can see that now a days masses ate very smart and they want to save their money for their better future and for emergency cases.to elaborate it, as it is noticed that travelling abroad is very expensive like, new clothes flight tickets , hotel to live, food and many more. And this shows that they spend huge money just on their vacations leads to them start their savings from a zero. For instance, a survey conducted in England revealed that 56% of individuals utilize their all savings to just enjoy their vacations in abroad. Thus, travelling outside of country can be extremely expensive.

Secondly, they will be able to give some time to their family members because as it is seen that in this era almost very adult or family member do work in their daily life and they have rotating working hours. and according to me in future people will prefer to spend their vacations with their family at home to their strong bonding with each other and parents can also look forward for their children.

To conclude, i strongly believe that in future masses will choose their home country to pend their holiday to save their money and to make a strong relationship with their family.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The essay addresses the prompt and maintains a clear position throughout. The ideas regarding financial savings and family bonding are relevant and logically linked to the topic. However, the development is somewhat limited. For instance, the example provided—a survey in England—is vague and lacks sufficient detail to fully support the argument. The response would benefit from more nuanced exploration of why people might prefer domestic travel beyond just cost, such as environmental concerns or convenience. The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points, but the overall depth of analysis remains at a basic level, preventing it from reaching a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the argument. There is a logical progression from the introduction to the body paragraphs and the conclusion. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'First of all', 'Secondly', 'To conclude'). Additionally, some transitions between sentences are abrupt, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the connection between 'rotating working hours' and the preference for domestic travel could be more explicitly stated. Paragraphing is present but could be more effectively managed to enhance the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. The student relies on basic, repetitive phrasing such as 'masses', 'spend their money', and 'vacations'. There are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'upcoming time' instead of 'the near future' and 'send their time' (a typo for 'spend'). While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of more sophisticated or topic-specific vocabulary limits the score. To improve, the student should aim to use a wider range of synonyms and more precise collocations related to travel and economics.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'this essay agree'), incorrect article usage ('to another countries'), and punctuation errors (e.g., missing spaces after periods and incorrect capitalization). The sentence 'as it is seen that in this era almost very adult or family member do work' is clunky and grammatically flawed. While the meaning is usually understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the essay from achieving a higher score. More attention to basic sentence construction and proofreading is necessary.

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