Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, travelling for various purposes become easier and more accessible because of developed vehicles. Many people believes that travelling to other nations is best options for their summer holidays while others opposing that their are plenty of things to do in their own country. The both viewpoints along with my viewpoints for former view have been explained in the following paragraphs.

To begin with, the first and foremost reason for travelling to abroad is to explore new destinations and new culture. To illustrate, there are number of places like old forts, museums, beaches and many other things are located in other countries. Additionally, every countries have their own rituals and traditions for different things like marriage and so on. Therefore, travelling to other countries help to gain new experiences and knowledge. Moreover, welcoming more travelers in host countries helps to increase employments and tourisms in host countries, resulted in increment of their GDP.

However, many people are oppose this travelling to abroad because of lack of fund and and lot of expense. To explain, travelling to abroad have few means of transportations likewise flights, cruise, steamer etc. The price of tickets for their transportations is very high especially for middle class family. Also, they have to book hotels for stay, rent a car for travelling and spend money on foods or other expenses. Instead staying within the country and travelling to different place less expensive option.

In conclusion, although, travelling to abroad for holidays is very expensive, it gives memorable experience and knowledge to travelers and it helps to increase employment and economy of host countries.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both travelling abroad and domestic tourism. However, the position is not consistently clear. While you mention your viewpoint in the introduction, the conclusion fails to explicitly state whether you agree or disagree with the future trend mentioned in the prompt. The ideas are relevant, but the development is somewhat superficial. For example, the argument regarding economic benefits is mentioned but not fully explored in relation to the future trend of domestic travel. To improve, ensure your position is maintained throughout the essay and that your arguments directly support your stance on the future shift in travel habits.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'To begin with', 'Additionally', and 'However'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly inaccurate, such as 'The both viewpoints along with my viewpoints for former view'. The progression of ideas is generally logical, but the transitions between sentences could be smoother. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and some sentences feel disjointed. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring they are used naturally will help elevate your score in this area.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'developed vehicles' instead of 'improved transportation' and 'increment of their GDP' instead of 'increase in their GDP'. You rely on basic vocabulary, and there is a lack of less common lexical items or idiomatic expressions. To improve, focus on learning collocations and more sophisticated synonyms for common words like 'expensive' or 'travelling'. Proofreading for word forms, such as 'employments' (uncountable), is also essential.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede flow. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('Many people believes', 'every countries have'), article usage ('travelling to abroad'), and pluralization ('employments'). While you attempt some complex structures, they are often marred by errors, such as 'resulted in increment of their GDP'. The range of structures is limited, and the errors are noticeable. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Reviewing sentence construction will help you produce more error-free sentences, which is necessary for a higher band score.

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