Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In the day to come, more people will decide to go on vacation in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Although travelling abroad for vacation in other country is a personal choice. People go for vacation for various reasons some for relaxation, exploring and shopping.While people think going to spend holiday in other country is the best others think the opposite.
Firstly the cost involve in travelling to another country for vacation is highly expensive and there is need to put a lot logistics in order like accommodation, feeding, travelling expense, flight cost and other necessity.
Moreover, travelling to another country for holiday make you explore you visit various places like museums,malls , restaurants and others places of your choice.it can improve your communication skills,make improve your knowledge , and you also know other people culture.
However,in the days to come people will spend their holiday in their country because of the advancement of technology those things that amaze them can easily be found in their country at no cost or at lower cost.with the help of technology
In my own view, it think about both should consider if there be need
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you attempt to address the prompt, the position is not clearly maintained throughout the essay. The final paragraph is incomplete and lacks a coherent conclusion, leaving the argument underdeveloped. To improve, you must ensure each body paragraph provides a clear, supported argument that directly relates to your stance. The current length and lack of depth in your reasoning prevent a higher score, as the task is only partially addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay shows some attempt at organization through paragraphing, but the flow of ideas is frequently interrupted by disjointed sentences and a lack of logical progression. Cohesive devices are used sparingly and sometimes incorrectly, such as the abrupt transition in the final paragraph. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow your line of reasoning. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in contrast') to connect your ideas more fluidly and ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'vacation' and 'holiday' throughout the text. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'put a lot logistics in order' and 'make improve your knowledge'. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of precision and the use of simple, everyday language restrict the score. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more topic-specific vocabulary related to travel, tourism, and economic factors, and work on using words in their correct collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'travelling to another country for holiday make you'), missing articles, and punctuation errors. The sentence structure is often fragmented, particularly in the final paragraph where the thought is left unfinished. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like missing 's' on plural nouns and correct verb forms. Increasing the variety of complex sentences will also help improve your score.
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