Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Todays generation is always excited to visit new places in their leisure time. To some extend i am agree with phenomenon as reasons will be discussing in upcoming paragraphs.
To start with, some people think in future, most of the people prefer to enjot their holidays in their own country rether than going to abroad as young ones have a different kind of crazyness in their mind among going to abroad. they are always finding the ways that they can visit international countries. mainly in summer holidays they give priority to another courtries because of their cold weather as compared to India and in winter holidays there are higher chances to approve visitor visa applications because of christmis and new year.
Moreover, local people are already bored from same views so they are not excited to spend their holidays by staying in their home countries as they want to do something memorable so they always choose international countries over their own country. Another main reason is the beauty of international countries because of its mountains and river and specially friendly environment. I have an example of my own self when i was in 10th standard then on my summer holidays i get chance to went to Mexico and i enjoyes alot with my siblings because its my first time to visit another country and from that day now whenever i have winter or summer holidays i always willing to go somewhere out of country.
In conclusion, although there are number of beautiful spots in our home country for visting but according to me future generation may prefer travel to abroad beacuse of beauty and popularity and good athority regulation system of international countries.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt regarding whether people will holiday domestically rather than abroad in the future, taking a clear position in the introduction ("To some extend i am agree with phenomenon"). However, the development of ideas is limited and at times confusing. In the second paragraph, the student attempts to argue why young people prefer going abroad, but the explanation shifts somewhat abruptly into visa application timings and weather comparisons. The third paragraph brings in personal experience ("I have an example of my own self when i was in 10th standard") which is acceptable for General Training, but the reasoning remains basic and repetitive. Overall, the ideas are relevant to the general topic, but the support lacks depth and structure, aligning best with a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, which provides a basic visual structure, but the progression of ideas is frequently disrupted. Cohesive devices are either missing, mechanical, or misused (e.g., starting sentences repetitively with "To start with" and "Moreover"). Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as the pronoun use in "rethan going to abroad as young ones have a different kind of crazyness in their mind among going to abroad." Furthermore, sentences are often run-on without appropriate punctuation or conjunctions, making the flow disjointed for the reader. This performance sits firmly at Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently relying on everyday words ("nice places", "holiday", "country", "beauty"). There are several noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as "i am agree", "crazyness", "another courtries", and "good athority regulation system". Less common lexical items are attempted (e.g., "phenomenon", "international countries"), but their usage is inaccurate or awkward. Spelling errors like "christmis", "visting", and "beacuse" also occur. While the meaning can generally be parsed, the lexical limitations and errors restrict the score to a Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of sentence structures, but complex sentences are frequently faulty, containing severe grammatical and punctuation errors. Examples include "as reasons will be discussing in upcoming paragraphs" and "when i was in 10th standard then on my summer holidays i get chance to went to Mexico and i enjoyes alot". Tense consistency is poorly maintained (switching between past and present inappropriately), and subject-verb agreement is frequently violated. Simple sentences are generally more successful, but the high frequency of grammatical errors causes difficulty and distraction for the reader, fitting the Band 4.5 to 5.0 range closely.
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