Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this modren era, everyone is serving full time job , or busy in their scdule . to get relief from the full fast paced job, people love to spend their vacationsns fabulously and waiting for it from long time. some people believe that , individuals loves to spend their holidays where they have nationality while others criticise it , and think people love to explore the foreign countries in their vacations period. while considering both views ,I partially agree with these points and reasons for it is mention in upcoming paragrapghs .

First paramount reason to spending holidays in their home country is to save money . To explain this , Most of the people have their budget and exact amount of money they want to spend in this free time . Rather than to booking international trips such as spending monet on tickets , accomodation , Air Bnb ,food , is getting out from their counting . For instance, if a person is taking off from the job , that is specific days. so they prefer to explore their own country and does want to involve in rush , flight delays because some of the people facing difficulties to cancel their flights on exact time , or having difficulity in the accomodation they booked . Apart from that, Some people doesnt explore their own country much in their life , In every country , there are eminent places that are tourism spots , or peple sare coming from abroad to visit those. If a person wants to spend holidays in his own country , he can choose wherever wants to go , or get a chance to visit his own country . The benefit of this is to , people can plan more activities related to this and explore much as they want . They dont even need to convertion the currency and they knoe . whats the accurate price of the product or trips is going on in their own country . For example , Some shoopers charge much as they see any tourist coming to visit their place because they know , Visitors doesnt know aboyt the local markt prices .

On the flip side , choose to travelling aboad is some of the people dream. The reason behind this , Some people love to travel or explore different countries in their life , they want to know about different people culture , their rituals , their food and most imprtant the history and eminent places situated in there. Moreover , They loves to spend time abroad to get reilef from the same surroundings.

in conclusion , i would say that . although

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt, discussing both the trend of staying within one's home country for holidays and the counter-view of traveling abroad. The candidate takes a clear partial position in the introduction, stating that they agree with both perspectives to a certain extent. Ideas are presented and supported with examples, such as avoiding flight delays, saving money on currency conversion, and escaping daily routines. However, some ideas lack deep extension and appear slightly repetitive, particularly regarding financial savings and avoiding the hassles of international travel. This aligns well with the Band 6 descriptor, where all parts are addressed with relevant ideas, though some parts and explanations could be more fully developed and clearly expressed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay demonstrates a coherent overall arrangement with a recognisable introduction and body paragraphs. Logical progression is attempted, and cohesive devices such as 'First paramount reason', 'Apart from that', 'On the flip side', and 'Moreover' are used to signpost ideas. However, paragraphing is problematic, as the essay lacks a proper concluding paragraph (it abruptly stops mid-sentence at 'although') and the second body paragraph is overly dense and long, containing multiple disparate points. Furthermore, referencing is sometimes unclear, and punctuation or capitalization errors at sentence boundaries disrupt the natural flow. These issues reflect Band 5 Coherence and Cohesion characteristics, where organisation is present but overall progression suffers from structural and cohesive flaws.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The candidate attempts a range of vocabulary appropriate for the topic, including terms like 'fast paced job', 'fabulously', 'eminent places', and 'tourist spots'. However, there are numerous lexical inaccuracies and awkward word choices throughout the text, such as 'serving full time job', 'waiting for it from long time', 'spending monet', 'does want to involve in rush', and 'convertion the currency'. Spelling mistakes are frequent (e.g., 'modren', 'scdule', 'vacationsns', 'accomodation', 'aboyt', 'markt'), which occasionally impedes the reader's understanding. While the vocabulary is adequate to convey the general message, the density of word-choice and spelling errors places this response firmly at Band 5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, including conditional and relative clauses (e.g., 'If a person is taking off from the job...', 'While considering both views, I partially agree...'). However, grammatical accuracy is weak throughout the text. There are frequent errors in verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and article usage, such as 'everyone is serving full time job', 'individuals loves', 'Visitors doesnt know', and 'choose to travelling aboad'. Punctuation is also erratic, with missing capital letters at the start of sentences and misuse of commas. Because complex structures are frequently faulty and errors are recurrent, the response fits the Band 5 descriptor for Grammatical Range and Accuracy.

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