Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Travelling is part part to refresh the mind . Some

of individauls prefer to go their home country whereas , other like to travel more foreign countries.

Every has there own opion for

travelling which i discussing in upcoming paragraphs .

There is alot of mind set of the people

in the world for travelling , why individauls

like to travel there back home in vacations because they want to adapt there culture as they prefer to

spend more of theri vacation time there where they born and brought .Spending a time with there closeones and friends living in backhome as to stay far from homesickness . For instance , story of

many community members in news how they feel without their families in abroad whenever they got a timr to travel their country they choose first that instead of other to feel some relax from

rush life and struggling time .

On the other side , many individuals think they want to explore more countries to gain knowlegde whereas , who like to travel more as a hobby . They balance the both in their vacations they like to travel with their famailies and loved ones in new countries to explore more . For example , i saw a plethora

of indivuals who

prefer to go at new places with their close ones to fresh themselevles .

To concloude , I reitrate that it is depend on people

to people to in their vacations what are the most preference they want . Major things is mind , where it is happy to refresh mind from busy life with loved ones either to go back home country or somewhere to new place trip

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both sides of the issue—staying in one's home country for holidays versus traveling abroad. The writer attempts to formulate a position, mentioning why some prefer domestic holidays (e.g., to reconnect with culture and family) and others prefer international travel (e.g., to gain knowledge and explore). However, the ideas are often underdeveloped, repetitive, and lack clear extension. The reasoning is frequently obscured by awkward phrasing and generalized statements, such as 'story of many community members in news'. While the core components of the task are touched upon, the lack of fully elaborated arguments places this performance firmly at Band 5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The text features basic paragraphing, separating the introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the overall progression of ideas is hindered by poor referencing and a lack of clear cohesive devices. Sentences within paragraphs often feel disjointed, as seen in phrases like 'Every has there own opion for travelling which i discussing in upcoming paragraphs.' Transitional phrases are either misused or absent, and repetitive structures disrupt the flow. While the overarching structure indicates an attempt at organisation, the execution suffers from frequent mechanical and inaccurate cohesion, leading to a Band 5 score.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used throughout the essay is limited and repetitive, with noticeable errors that cause difficulty for the reader. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary items, such as 'plethora', 'adapt their culture', and 'homesickness', but these are frequently misused or accompanied by collocation errors. There are numerous spelling mistakes ('individauls', 'opion', 'knowlegde', 'concloude', 'reitrate') and basic word-form errors ('part part', 'fresh themselevles'). Because the lexical range is narrow and frequent errors impede smooth reading, this meets the criteria for Band 4.5, rounded to Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is severely restricted, relying heavily on simple and attempted complex sentence forms that are frequently faulty. There is a persistent lack of control over basic syntax, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation. Examples of severe grammatical inaccuracies include 'which i discussing in upcoming paragraphs', 'where they born and brought', and 'it is depend on people to people'. Run-on sentences and missing verbs are common throughout the response. Because errors are frequent, occur in almost every sentence, and occasionally distort meaning, this warrants a Band 4.0.

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