Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In my point of view, I really don't agree not traveling aborad on holiday, different people have different perspective in this topic, but i prefer to go on the holiday in abroad so that we can see different culture of diffrent people, we get chance to make more friends and enjoy. We get to know how people stay, how people celebrate their festival in outside the country. We can feel so relax after visiting abroad. We get chance to learn new things get different information. Initially after the visit with family, friends it will became so memorable jorney which we always wanted to remember.

Every time visting own country can be so bored, if we wanted to make life adventures, then visiting our own country cannot be the best option.

Every people have dreamed to go aboard like canada, america, germany so to fullfilled the wish and to make self happy to make dreams come true then we have to take further step and went to abroad for the vacation.

In the future, If i could choose then i always choose to go aborad for my holiday to see the culture, food, traditional dress, mountains of thailand because i always wanted to explore thailand and see how people live there what kind of house, ocean are there.Moreover, I prefer to go aboard in the holiday to learn and to live life perfectly as we always dreamed of. I wanted to see different people and their thoughts, perspective which will be so benefit for us to learn.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by clearly taking a position against the statement, stating that people will continue to travel abroad. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. The writer relies heavily on listing general benefits of international travel, such as seeing different cultures, making friends, and trying new foods, without fully extending or substantiating these points with specific examples or deep analysis. While a personal preference is stated and supported by mentioning destinations like Canada, America, Germany, and Thailand, the arguments remain somewhat superficial and rely on broad generalisations. Overall, the prompt is addressed with a clear stance, placing the response solidly at a Band 5.0 level for Task Achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay displays some organisation and attempts at cohesive devices, but the overall progression is hampered by poor paragraphing and a lack of logical links. The text consists of a very long opening paragraph, a couple of very brief single-sentence paragraphs, and a final concluding paragraph. This structure fails to group related ideas effectively. Cohesive devices are used minimally and sometimes inappropriately, such as using 'Every time' as a transition or repetitive sentence starters like 'We get...'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making the flow bumpy. Because there is an attempt to structure an argument with some signposting like 'Moreover', but paragraphing is largely ineffective, the coherence and cohesion score sits at a Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 for the descriptor match.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, with frequent word choice errors and misspellings. For example, 'aborad' and 'visting' are misspelled repeatedly, and phrases like 'go on the holiday in abroad' or 'feel so relax' show weak collocation and incorrect preposition usage. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'perspective', 'adventures', and 'explore', but these are often used inaccurately or ungrammatically. While the meaning remains generally understandable despite these lexical limitations, the frequent spelling and word choice errors place this response at a Band 5.0 for Lexical Resource.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response features a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and repetitive subject-verb patterns like 'We get to...' and 'I wanted to...'. When the student attempts more complex sentences, they are frequently faulty, containing punctuation errors, run-on sentences, and basic grammatical mistakes, such as 'Every people have dreamed to go aboard like canada...' and 'visitng own country can be so bored'. Errors occur with high frequency across almost every sentence, often causing difficulty for the reader and straining comprehension. Consequently, the grammatical range and accuracy correspond to a Band 4.0 descriptor.

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