Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Holiday is important for people espacialy those who work all the time. Holiday give a break from daily routine and chance to spent time with own families. On holiday, families go to other places where they spent time each other and make memories. First of all, some people believed that in the future, families choose to spent holiday in their own country instead of traveling abroad. I partly agree with this statement because some people dislike to traveling long and they want to trip their own countries and knowing what espacial things in their country but it is not wrong to say that majority of people want to go many countries and enjoy their traditions and visit their historical places. It is better for knowledge.

Regarding to, those people who choose spend holiday in their country. They are patriot and feel peace in their country. Another reason, they do not like traveling and their have no time to travel long just for fun. Followed by, some people think traveling other country is just waist of money, people feel tired and hard to consantrate to own work again.

On the other hand, indiviuals like to visit abroad especially young people because the wish to know new things and enjoyment arroused them to go abroad. Therefore, when they have chance to go out of country they always ready. For example, my friend work in good company and when he had holiday he book a ticket to one country every year he go different country because he want to visit whole word and want to know different countries tridions and their important places.

To conclude, i have a mixed opinion because some people dislike to long traveling and want spent time to their country even they had a fixed place where they go every holiday and some people want to visit diffrent places and meet different people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both sides of the argument—holidaying in one's own country versus traveling abroad—and presents a clear, albeit somewhat mixed, position ("I partly agree with this statement"). The ideas are relevant and supported by general reasons, such as patriotism and cost-efficiency for domestic travel, and curiosity and cultural exploration for international travel. However, some ideas remain slightly under-developed and rely on generalisations rather than deep extension. For instance, the paragraph regarding domestic tourists lists ideas briefly rather than fully elaborating on them. Overall, the content is appropriate and covers the prompt well, earning a solid band score for this criterion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The text maintains a coherent overall arrangement with clear paragraphing that separates the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'First of all', 'On the other hand', and 'To conclude', although some linking expressions feel mechanical or awkward, such as 'Regarding to' and 'Followed by'. Referencing is generally clear, though minor issues with pronoun agreement occasionally make tracking the logical flow slightly harder. Progression is visible throughout, moving smoothly from the introduction to the competing viewpoints and finally to the summary. While cohesive devices are occasionally faulty, the overall structure remains logical and easy to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully attempting less common items such as 'patriot', 'tridions' (traditions), and 'enjoyment arroused'. However, there are frequent spelling errors (e.g., 'espacialy', 'consantrate', 'diffrent', 'waist' instead of waste) and occasional word-choice inaccuracies (e.g., 'know what espacial things', 'they have no time to travel long'). These errors do not impede overall communication, as the meaning remains clear, but they restrict the lexical score. To reach a higher band, the student needs greater accuracy in spelling and collocation when using less common vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The essay displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, attempting structures such as conditional and relative clauses ('those people who choose spend holiday', 'when they have chance to go out of country'). However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly regarding verb tenses, missing auxiliary verbs, prepositions, and articles (e.g., 'Holiday give a break', 'they spent time each other', 'dislike to traveling', 'they had no time'). Many complex sentences contain errors that interrupt the flow. Despite these frequent mistakes, communication is rarely completely obscured. Control over basic structures is evident, but accuracy in complex sentence formation needs further development.

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