Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the future people will not choose traveling abroad for their holiday and choose their own country as one of their destination.

Many people are travelling abroad than to choose their own country as one of the main destination to celebrate holidays. However I will agree that in the coming years to go, some people will celebrate it to their own coutry it is beacause many of the people still not inform how important to enjoy their own land than other country. Most important is how to spread-out to the beauty of the land. Mostly people will appreciate if their friend recommend them to relax their good times during holiday at their own place, and they will not waste time and money to go abroad for holiday.

Firstly, some people not yet inform some beautifull places that sorround them. In form of advertisement many people will inform and they will not decided to go abroad. They can save money and time for their celebration of holidays. They can bring all the family members without spending a lot of money and time.

Secondly, friends recommendation can help a lot. With your friend and family can spend time together in their own land specially during birthday bring some videoke for happenings it can really save a lot of efforts.

I conclude, that this coming future some people will absolutely change their mind not to go other country to celebrate holidays because it is very time consuming and probably can save more money.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by discussing why some people might choose to holiday in their home country rather than abroad. However, the position is not always clearly sustained throughout, and the ideas presented are somewhat limited and under-developed. For instance, the notions of saving money and recommendations from friends are mentioned repeatedly across different paragraphs without significant expansion or deep exploration. To reach a higher level, the writer needs to fully develop their main ideas by providing more detailed, specific explanations and extending the supporting arguments rather than relying on repetitive statements.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is a basic level of organisation, with attempts made to divide the text into paragraphs and use transitional markers such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'I conclude'. However, the overall progression of ideas lacks clarity and flow, making the argument feel somewhat disjointed. Cohesive devices are often used inaccurately or repetitively, and referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in transitional phrases like 'I conclude, that this coming future'. To improve, the writer should ensure that ideas follow a more logical sequence and that cohesive devices connect sentences and paragraphs smoothly without mechanical repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The writer attempts some less common phrases, but there are noticeable lexical errors, such as 'not inform' instead of 'uninformed' or 'unaware', 'coutry' instead of 'country', and 'spread-out to the beauty'. Word choices and collocations are frequently unnatural, which occasionally causes difficulty for the reader. To achieve a stronger band, the student needs to expand their vocabulary range, pay closer attention to correct word forms and spelling, and use more precise terminology suited to the topic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying primarily on simple sentences and basic patterns. Attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty, leading to frequent errors in grammar, verb forms, and sentence construction. Examples include 'Many people are travelling abroad than to choose' and 'some people not yet inform some beautifull places that sorround them.' Errors in prepositions, subject-verb agreement, and missing auxiliary verbs are persistent and can cause difficulty for the reader. To progress, the writer should focus on mastering basic sentence structures while gradually introducing accurate complex clauses.

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