Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

A significant no of individuals will like to spend holidays in their own country rather than to travel abroad, in the future. This argument has been debated for the past few years, but now it has become controversal, with many people claiming that it is good to travel abroad while others rejects this notion.

In my opinion, the both perspectives are equally important.

First and formost, the reason to visit abroad is that it provides both entertainment and learning. We can learn a lot of information about the different cultures and communities. We can have the opportunity to enlighten ourselves with the communication skills and critical thinking when we encounter with other nations.

On the other hand, if we visit we our country it is beneficial for the economy of the country. We spend there money and contribute to the financial growth of the country. In this digital era, it would be

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You address the topic by discussing reasons to travel abroad and the benefits of holidaying within one’s own country. However, your position is not clear: “the both perspectives are equally important” does not directly say whether you agree or disagree with the prediction in the question. The ideas are relevant but only briefly stated; for example, you mention learning about cultures and supporting the national economy without explaining how these points shape your view or giving a specific example. The response also ends mid-sentence at “In this digital era, it would be,” leaving the argument and conclusion incomplete. The response is below the required 250 words, so it cannot develop the task sufficiently. State your position clearly, support each main reason, and finish with a conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening paragraph introduces the topic, and “First and foremost” and “On the other hand” signal contrasting points. This gives the reader some sense of the intended structure. However, the progression is limited because the two body points are not developed, and the final paragraph stops abruptly, so there is no conclusion to bring the argument together. Some connections are also unclear, particularly the shift from learning about other cultures to improving “communication skills and critical thinking.” Use one paragraph for each main reason, explain how each supports your position, and add a concluding paragraph. Clearer links between claims and explanations would make the organisation more coherent.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You show some range beyond basic vocabulary, using expressions such as “financial growth,” “different cultures and communities,” and “critical thinking.” These choices help communicate the topic, and the reader can generally understand your intended meaning. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, including “a significant no of individuals,” “visit abroad,” and “enlighten ourselves with the communication skills.” There are also spelling errors in “controversal” and “formost,” and informal abbreviation in “no.” These issues limit precision and naturalness, even though they do not prevent understanding. Aim for standard forms and common collocations, such as “a significant number,” “travel abroad,” and “develop communication skills.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrastive clause beginning “while others…” and a conditional structure, “if we visit…”. Some sentences communicate their main meaning, but grammatical errors are frequent enough to make parts awkward or unclear. Examples include “the both perspectives,” “others rejects,” “when we encounter with other nations,” and “we spend there money.” The sentence beginning “if we visit…” also contains an unclear pronoun sequence, and the final sentence is unfinished. Review articles and word order, subject–verb agreement, and verb patterns after “encounter.” For example, write “both perspectives,” “others reject,” and “when we encounter people from other countries.” Proofread each sentence for a complete grammatical structure.

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