Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, more and more people are going abroad for study and job. People don't have time for returning to their home country for holidays and festival. In future, many people argue that people will come for holidays in their own country rather than travel for another country. I totally agree with this statement. We will discuss in detail in the ensuing paragraph.

To begin with, most of the students and workers are leaving their home country for future study and career. They don't have time in between thier study and job to go home in holidays and specially celebrate festivals. They miss their home, family and friends. So, whenever they got time for holidays people choose to travel to their own country rsthdr than anywhere else. Travel to home country gives people escape from hectic schedule and routine. It gives refreshment, mental peace and happiness to meet their family after so long. It also helpful to boost energy. For example, if any students returning their home after 5 years, first he/she is very excited to meet their family and friends. This break from study or work helps to them boose their energy and make them more focused towards their work.

On the othef hand, People who live aborad travel to their country after long period many thing and places been changed and after waching it people recall their old memories with that place. Meeting with frien

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

Your position is clear: “I totally agree,” and the point about students and workers wanting to reunite with family is relevant to holidays in their home country. However, the response only partially develops the task. Much of the discussion concerns people who have moved abroad for study or work, rather than explaining why more people in the future will choose domestic holidays instead of travelling abroad. The second supporting point is cut off at “Meeting with frien,” so it cannot be evaluated as a complete reason or example. The response also contains 236 words, below the required 250. Develop both reasons fully, connect them directly to the future trend in the question, and include a complete conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: an introductory paragraph is followed by a main supporting paragraph, and “To begin with” and “On the other hand” signal a change in direction. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow because the opening focuses on people travelling abroad for study and work, while the main argument shifts to returning home for holidays. The second body paragraph ends abruptly, leaving the discussion incomplete. Some links are also repetitive or unclear, such as the repeated use of “So” and “It” without always making the reference precise. Plan a clear sequence—position, one reason per paragraph, supporting example, and conclusion—and use linking phrases only where they accurately show the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “hectic schedule,” “mental peace,” “routine,” and “old memories.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning awkward or unclear. For example, “go home in holidays,” “travel for another country,” and “boost energy” are not natural expressions in these contexts. Spelling errors such as “thier,” “aborad,” and “waching” also affect readability, while the unfinished phrase “Meeting with frien” leaves the final idea unclear. Build accuracy by learning common travel collocations and checking spelling carefully. More precise wording would help distinguish travelling within one’s country from returning to one’s home country.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, for example, “This break from study or work helps to them boose their energy and make them more focused towards their work.” However, errors in sentence structure and verb forms are frequent, and they sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “whenever they got time” instead of a consistent present or future form, “if any students returning their home,” and “It also helpful.” There are also problems with articles, agreement, and prepositions, as in “after long period” and “helps to them.” Practise forming complete clauses with accurate subject–verb patterns, and proofread each sentence for tense, articles, and prepositions.

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