Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Traveling is becoming increasingly common. It is argu that individuals will not go in foreign countries on holidays, they will travel within their country on vacations. I disagree with this perspective because its totelly on the type of holidays and I believe that traveling in abroad will also consider for vacations in the future.

People will continue to go abord on holidays in the future, the first and foremost reason is exploring .This means, there are many people who travel other nations to see there culture , way of talking, food and lifestyle. This not only give the information abut the place but also helps to know about how other people are lived in other contries.

Furhtermore, knowledge is the other significant cause of traveling in the other parts of the world. If people go well-developed nations, they can see the advance technology which may used by the individuals in their daliy life who are living there. Consequently, traveling in abroad can hepls to enhance their knowledge.

On the other hand, traveling abroad and with in the country is depend on the situation.This means, If individuals have huge timefor traveling, then they can go aborad to explore. Similarly, people can travel with in their country if they do not have long holidays.

Taking everything into consideration, although traveling foreign and in their own country totelly depend on the situation, I believe that traveling abroad can not vanish in future becaus many people have crusity to explore other nations and enhance their knowledge.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you disagree that domestic holidays will replace overseas travel, and the conclusion restates this view. You give relevant reasons, especially experiencing other cultures and learning about technology in developed countries, and you acknowledge that holiday choice can depend on available time. However, these points are not developed equally. The cultural-exploration idea is explained briefly, while the technology point remains general and would benefit from a specific example. The paragraph about time also introduces a qualification without explaining how it affects your overall disagreement. To strengthen the response, explain each reason with a concrete example and show more explicitly why overseas travel will remain attractive alongside domestic holidays.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, two supporting paragraphs, a contrasting point, and a conclusion. Linking expressions such as “Furthermore,” “On the other hand,” and “Taking everything into consideration” help signal the stages of the argument. The progression is generally understandable, but some connections are mechanical or unclear. For example, “On the other hand” suggests a counterargument, yet the paragraph mainly says that either type of travel depends on the time available; the relationship to your main position could be made clearer. Some sentences also contain unclear references, such as “This means” without a precise link to the preceding claim. Use transitions that express the exact relationship between ideas, and connect each paragraph more explicitly to your central argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to travel and the reasons for it, including “exploring,” “culture,” “lifestyle,” “developed nations,” and “enhance their knowledge.” This gives you enough language to communicate the main ideas. However, noticeable spelling and word-choice errors sometimes make the reader pause, as in “totelly,” “aborad,” “crusity,” and “there culture.” Several phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, including “traveling in abroad” and “the first and foremost reason is exploring.” Aim to learn common collocations as complete phrases, such as “travel abroad,” “experience another culture,” and “a key reason.” Proofreading spelling and choosing more natural expressions would make your vocabulary clearer and more effective.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional structures such as “If people go well-developed nations, they can see…” and a concession in the conclusion beginning “although.” This shows some range, and the main message is generally understandable. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction remain noticeable. For example, “This not only give” needs subject–verb agreement, while “how other people are lived” uses an incorrect verb form. The opening sentence also joins two complete ideas with a comma, and “traveling abroad and with in the country is depend” has problems with both agreement and verb structure. Practise building accurate complex sentences and check each clause for a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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