Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In the coming period of the time, many people will prefer to visit their own home countries rather then going to other countries for their vacations.As I agree with this statement, in the following essay I will briefy introduce two main reasons follow by examples for each, and in the end I will do the conclusion for this statement.

The first main cause that I beleive people will travel more to their own countries is meeting their families,siblings and friends.Specifically, human life is so hectic nowadays that every body gets very little time to see their parents or siblings.That is why, when anybody get small vacation or time off from the work,the best pratice use of that is visiting hometown.In addition to that, spending time in the childhood home, or going around old places make them feel an inner peace being their childhood memories.

Moreover, the second main reason that I think of is that own country is a cheap budget friendly trip.For instance, when people go to the new unkown countries that they never went before, cost alot more money to book the hotels or rental car.However, going to own country saves alot of the money because the of parent's home and car that they can use for free.Moreover, food is home made which is healthy and cheap.Additionally, people feels more connected to their roots as they spend more time doing thing which is more related to their own culture.

In the conclusion, I would say people prefer to go their own country because in this way not only they save money, but also feels more connected to their roots,parents and their culture.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear from the introduction (“As I agree with this statement”) and remains consistent in the conclusion. You give two relevant reasons—visiting family and friends, and saving money—and support them with examples such as using a parent’s home or car. This fully covers the central question and shows some development. However, the first reason focuses mainly on visiting relatives and returning to childhood places, rather than explaining more broadly why domestic holidays will become more popular in the future. The cost argument is also somewhat general and assumes travellers can use family accommodation and transport. To strengthen the response, explain why these trends are likely to increase and develop each example with more specific detail.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The essay has a clear overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting separate reasons, and a conclusion that restates your view. Signposting such as “The first main cause,” “Moreover,” and “In the conclusion” helps readers follow the progression. The ideas within each paragraph are generally relevant and connected. However, the linking can feel mechanical because several transitions announce the next point rather than showing the relationship between ideas. Some connections are also unclear, as in “the best pratice use of that is visiting hometown,” and the second body paragraph moves from cost to cultural connection without fully explaining the link. Use more natural transitions and make the relationship between each supporting example and its main point explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to holidays, family, and culture, including “vacation,” “hometown,” “childhood memories,” and “connected to their roots.” These choices communicate the main ideas, and there are attempts at less common expressions. However, the range and control are limited by repeated general wording and noticeable spelling, word-form, and collocation errors. Examples include “briefy,” “beleive,” “unkown,” “cheap budget friendly trip,” and “cost alot more money.” Some phrases are difficult to interpret naturally, such as “the best pratice use of that.” Build a more precise range for discussing domestic tourism and costs, and check spelling and common word partnerships. More accurate phrasing would make your ideas easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including a reason clause beginning “That is why” and a conditional example beginning “when people go to the new unkown countries.” The overall meaning is usually clear, but some errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and punctuation remain. For example, “when anybody get” needs subject–verb agreement, while “people feels” should use a plural verb. The sentence “the best pratice use of that is visiting hometown” has an unclear grammatical structure, and several sentences run together after full stops, such as “vacations.As I agree” and “car.However.” Practise accurate clause construction and agreement, and use consistent spacing and punctuation. These improvements would help you express the same range of ideas more reliably.

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