Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email:

• recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn
• explain how your friend could learn this sport
• suggest that you both learn this sport together

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear john,

I hope you are doing well ?

I am writing this letter to you because rectenly i am moved in your city.

i am planning to learning a hockey game because its our national sport.

you could take a admission in hockey school they will gives you 3-4 weeks classes a month.

if you wants to learn this sport then i can also take admission with you bacause you can motivate me as well as you are good athele .

i am waiting for your resopse.

thank you

harpreet

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the main purpose by recommending hockey, suggesting a hockey school, and offering to learn with your friend. The personal reason that hockey is “our national sport” and the idea that your friend could motivate you make the email relevant. However, the response is brief and the advice is under-developed: it does not explain how to find or join a suitable school, what lessons involve, or why hockey would suit your friend. The invitation to learn together is present but could be made clearer and more specific. The response also falls 59 words short of the required minimum, so several task points remain only partially addressed. Add practical details and develop each requested point.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The ideas appear in a generally sensible order: you introduce the reason for writing, recommend hockey, explain where to learn, and suggest joining together. This gives the reader a basic structure, and phrases such as “if you wants to learn this sport” signal a connection between ideas. However, the email is presented as one short block, with little development or progression between points. Some links are unclear, particularly the move from being new to the city to planning to learn hockey. Use separate paragraphs for the recommendation, learning arrangements, and invitation, and add linking phrases such as “You could also…” or “That way…” to make the relationships between ideas clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough basic vocabulary to communicate the central message, including “hockey,” “classes,” “motivate,” and “national sport.” The tone is recognisably personal and suitable for writing to a friend. However, the range is limited, and several word choices or spellings make the message less natural, such as “a hockey game” for the sport, “take a admission,” and “good athele.” “Resopse” and “rectenly” also contain spelling errors. These issues do not prevent the reader from understanding the main points, but they reduce clarity and control. Build a wider set of natural phrases for giving advice and describing lessons, and check spelling and collocations before sending the email.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response mainly uses short, simple statements, with one attempt to connect ideas using “if” and “because.” This is enough to convey the basic message, but the range is limited and errors occur frequently. Examples include “I am planning to learning,” “they will gives,” and “if you wants,” where verb forms or agreement are incorrect. There are also problems with articles and sentence punctuation, as in “take a admission” and the question mark after “doing well.” Capitalisation at the start of sentences and for the name “John” is inconsistent. Practise accurate present and future forms, subject–verb agreement, and article use, then combine ideas in a few controlled complex sentences.

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