Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email:

• recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn
• explain how your friend could learn this sport
• suggest that you both learn this sport together

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

DEAR SIMRAN,

I HOPE YOU ARE DOING WELL. I AM HAPPY BECAUSE YOU ASKED FOR ADVICE TO LEARN A NEW SPORT. IT IS REALLY GOOD TO PARTICIPATE AND LEARN NEW GAMES FOR OUR PHYSICAL AND MENTAL HEALTH. I THINK HOCKEY IS REALLY GOOD GAME FOR YOU TO LEARN AND IT IS NOT HARD. IT IS ALSO YOUR FAVOURITE GAME. MY UNCLE IS A COACH OF HOCKEY GAME AND WE CAN LEARN THIS GAME TOGETHER. IT WAS HARD FOR ME TO LEARN ALONE BECAUSE IF WE BOTH WILL START LEARNING THIS GAME WE WILL ALSO FEEL MOTIVATED BY EACH OTHER. I WILL BE HAPPY TO ASK MY UNCLE TO TEACH US THE HOCKEY IF YOU ARE INTERESTED. FIRST OF ALL, WE SHOULD START PREPARING OUR BODY PHYSICALLY FOR THE GAME. I THINK WE SHOULD START RUNNING FROM TOMORROW FOR HALF AN HOUR THEN WE WILL GO IN GROUND TO LEARN THE GAME FROM UNCLE. I AM VERY EXCITED TO LEARN THIS GAME WITH YOU.

THANKS

REGARDS SONALI

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.5

You address all three requirements clearly: you recommend hockey, explain that your uncle can teach it, and invite Simran to learn with you. The personal details—“It is also your favourite game” and your plan to practise together—make the advice relevant and give the email a clear purpose. You also explain why learning together could help, saying you would feel motivated by each other. To make the response more fully developed, give a little more practical detail about learning hockey, such as where lessons would take place, what equipment you would need, or how often you could practise. The suggestion to run first is useful, but its connection to learning hockey could be explained more clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The ideas are relevant and generally follow a sensible order: you introduce the request, recommend hockey, explain who could teach you, and suggest preparing and practising together. However, the response is presented as one long block, so the recommendation, learning plan, and invitation are not clearly separated. Several sentences also begin with “I think,” “I,” or “we,” which makes the progression feel repetitive, while “First of all” does not lead into a clearly ordered set of steps. Use short paragraphs and clearer links—for example, move from why hockey suits Simran to how your uncle could teach you, then finish with a specific invitation. This would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the main advice, with relevant terms such as “coach,” “motivated,” “physically,” and “participate.” The reader can understand your recommendation and plan. However, several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, including repeated uses of “game” and “learn this game,” and “good game” is not a natural collocation here. “Go in ground” is also unclear, and “the hockey” uses an unnecessary article. Aim for more precise sport-related wording and natural collocations, such as “take up hockey,” “attend coaching sessions,” and “practise on the field.” These choices would make the email sound more fluent and appropriate for a friendly message.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You communicate the main ideas using both simple sentences and some attempts at longer structures, such as “because if we both will start learning this game we will also feel motivated.” However, the longer constructions are often inaccurate, and many sentences have problems with articles, verb forms, or sentence structure. For example, “I am happy because you asked” would be more natural as “I’m glad you asked,” while “if we both will start” should use a present form after “if”: “if we both start.” The sentence beginning “First of all” also needs clearer grammatical construction. Practise accurate conditional sentences and article use, and vary sentence patterns while keeping each sentence controlled. Standard sentence-case capitalization and punctuation would also improve readability.

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