Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email:

• recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn
• explain how your friend could learn this sport
• suggest that you both learn this sport together

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear John,

I hope you are having a gala time in our town, I am glad you are in the same city and we can meet everyday. In your previouse mail as,you asked a sport you wanted to join in our town.

I would recommend you join our traditional sport which is Hockey, it's a team sport and need 12 members in a team. This will not only help you build your physical strength but also helps you in learning the skills like team coordination and communication.

This game is played with a hockey stuck and we have to put the ball in the goal net wby hitting the ball with the help of our hockey stick.As, you are residing near the Valley park, on everyweekday a well known coach helps the children and adults to learn this activity.

Lets start learning Hockey together and we can meet after our working hours and can have a cup a tea after our practice. I will be in the park around 6:00pm will wait for you to come.

Rest we will have a chat once we meet.

Yours lovingly,

Ram sharma

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You address all three parts of the task: you recommend hockey, explain that a coach teaches it at Valley Park, and invite John to learn with you. The advice is relevant and the friendly tone suits an email to a friend. You also add practical details, such as meeting after work and suggesting a time. The sport’s benefits and basic rules provide some support, although the explanation of how John can learn is brief; you could make it more useful by mentioning how to contact the coach, what equipment to bring, or when sessions take place. Overall, the purpose is clear and the main ideas are extended, but a little more specific development would make the advice more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The email has a clear overall shape: an opening, a recommendation with supporting information, an invitation, and a friendly closing. Paragraphing helps the reader follow these stages, and phrases such as “This will not only…” and “Lets start learning…” connect ideas. However, some links are awkward or unclear, particularly “In your previouse mail as,you asked a sport you wanted to join,” which makes the transition into the recommendation difficult to follow. The description of the game also runs together, and the final “Rest we will have a chat” does not connect smoothly with the invitation. To strengthen progression, use clearer transitions and separate the sport’s benefits, learning arrangements, and invitation more distinctly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “physical strength,” “team coordination,” “communication,” and “coach,” and the friendly expressions help establish the relationship. There is some variety, but several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “gala time,” “join a sport,” “hockey stuck,” and “a cup a tea.” Spelling errors such as “previouse” and “everyweekday” also reduce accuracy. These issues do not prevent the reader from understanding the main message, but they make parts of the email less natural and precise. Aim for familiar, accurate phrases such as “having a great time,” “take up a sport,” and “hockey stick,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including the structure “This will not only help you… but also helps you…”. The message remains understandable, but errors in sentence construction, agreement, articles, and punctuation are noticeable. For example, the opening joins two complete ideas with a comma, while “it's a team sport and need 12 members” lacks a clear subject and has an agreement problem. In “This will not only help… but also helps…”, the verb forms should be parallel. There are also missing spaces after full stops and commas, which make some sentences harder to read. Practise building accurate compound sentences and checking that subjects and verbs agree.

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