Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email:

• recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn
• explain how your friend could learn this sport
• suggest that you both learn this sport together

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mitch,

I Hope you are well. I would like to recommend you you to learn swimming. There is a famous sports club near my residence and it won't be far away from your house. This sports club has dedicated professionals to teach swimming lessons. I was wondering to join you because i believe swimming is a kind of sport which everyone should learn . In my opinion it is a survival skill.

The sports is club is opened even on weekends. we both can visit together. Also, there is 40 percentage discount for new joiners. I think we should take advantage of this opportunity. I have also read impressive reviews about this club. I will see you this sunday and discuss further about our plans

I look forward hearing from you.

Yours Lovingly,

komal

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: swimming is recommended, the nearby club and its professional instructors explain how Mitch could learn, and “I was wondering to join you” conveys your wish to learn together. The survival-skill reason and the discount add relevant support. However, the learning plan could be more fully explained—for example, mention how to enrol or what lessons involve—and the invitation could be stated more directly. The response also falls 15 words short of the required minimum, so add a little detail about why swimming suits Mitch or how you could arrange your first lesson. These additions would make the advice more complete and developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The email has a clear overall arrangement: it opens with a greeting and recommendation, gives information about the club, and closes with a plan to discuss things. The paragraph break helps separate the recommendation from practical details, and connectors such as “Also” and “I think” make the sequence easy to follow. Some links are less smooth, however: the move from the club’s location to your personal wish to join Mitch is abrupt, and “we both can visit together” repeats the invitation rather than developing the plan. The final sentence about meeting on Sunday is useful, but could connect more explicitly to booking lessons. A clearer progression from recommendation to learning arrangements to shared next steps would strengthen cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for this familiar topic, and phrases such as “dedicated professionals,” “survival skill,” and “take advantage of this opportunity” communicate relevant ideas. You also use a suitable friendly email tone. Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, including “sports club” in “The sports is club,” “40 percentage discount,” and “impressive reviews.” “I look forward hearing from you” also shows an incorrect phrase choice. These do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, but they limit precision and naturalness. Aim to learn common combinations such as “swimming lessons,” “a 40 per cent discount,” and “look forward to hearing from you,” and check spelling and capitalisation consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple sentences and some longer structures, including “because I believe swimming is a kind of sport which everyone should learn.” Most of the message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors are noticeable. Examples include “I would like to recommend you you to learn,” “I was wondering to join you,” and “The sports is club is opened”; these involve sentence construction and verb forms. There are also errors in capitalisation and punctuation, such as lowercase “i” and “we,” and missing punctuation at the end of the Sunday sentence. Review verb patterns after “recommend,” “wonder,” and “look forward,” and proofread for agreement and sentence boundaries. More accurate control of these patterns would make your varied sentences clearer.

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