Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email:
- recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn
- explain how your friend could learn this sport
- suggest that you both learn this sport together
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ....................................,
Student answer (Band 6.5)
Dear Rohan,
I was glad to read your letter,I hope you are doing well.Its been while since we last spoke.I was pleased to see that you want learn new sports.
Their are alots of games that are famous these days, but i want to suggest you volleyball .You have good height, so this game will be suitable for you and their is chance to build a carrer in this game.
In our town there are several clubs who provide coaching for volleyball,but Sports with Amit is the best coaching centre in my knowledge.I had gone through their website they have glowing reveiws on Google.They charge $300 for one months that is quite expensive buy its worth it to pay that amount beacuse all coaches have more than 20 years practiacal expereince.
Actually, i was also planning to learn something new so lets start volleyball training together.In this way we will get chance to meet regularely.
Take care and let me know what you think
Love,
Deepak shamra
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.5
You address all three points clearly: volleyball is recommended, you explain how Rohan could learn through a local coaching centre, and you invite him to train with you. The advice is supported with relevant details, including his height, the centre’s reviews, its fee and the coaches’ experience. The friendly opening and closing also suit an email to a friend. The suggestion that volleyball could offer a career is less necessary and is not developed, while the practical advice about learning could be made more personal—for example, by proposing a trial lesson or a specific time to start. Overall, the task is covered well, with clear ideas and useful support, though a little more development of the practical plan would strengthen the response.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0
The email has a clear progression: you respond to your friend, recommend a sport, give information about coaching, and finish by suggesting that you learn together. Separate paragraphs help the reader follow these stages, and phrases such as “so” and “In this way” connect ideas. The sequence within the coaching paragraph is also logical, moving from available clubs to your preferred centre and its cost. However, some links are abrupt, and the opening runs several sentences together. The repeated use of “but” to introduce contrasting information could be varied, and a clearer transition into the joint-training invitation would make the progression smoother. The organisation is effective overall, though cohesion is not consistently polished.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the advice, and some choices are relevant and specific, such as “coaching centre,” “glowing reviews,” and “practical experience.” However, spelling errors are noticeable, including “carrer,” “reveiws,” “beacuse,” and “regularely,” and these reduce the accuracy of the message. There are also awkward or imprecise expressions: “famous these days” is not a natural way to describe popular sports, and “in my knowledge” does not clearly express that you consider the centre the best. “Build a career” is understandable but somewhat overstates the likely benefit of learning volleyball. Aim for more natural collocations and check spelling carefully; this would make your vocabulary more precise and fluent.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
You attempt a mixture of simple and more extended sentences, including the explanation beginning “You have good height, so…” and the reason introduced by “In this way.” The main message remains understandable, but errors in sentence boundaries, verb forms, articles and agreement are frequent enough to affect accuracy. For example, “I was glad to read your letter,I hope” needs a full stop or conjunction, “Its been while” needs a subject and article, and “you want learn” requires “to learn.” There are also errors in “Their are several clubs who provide” and “They charge $300 for one months.” Practise proofreading for complete sentences and basic verb and article patterns, while retaining your attempts to connect ideas in longer structures.
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