Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-07-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email:
- recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn
- explain how your friend could learn this sport
- suggest that you both learn this sport together
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ....................................,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Dear dhruvin, I hope you are healthy right now. I heard that you recently moved in the same town where i lived that is good. I got your messgae about developing a new sport i would reccomend try to play volleyball attributable to height. This sport need more staminar that you have. My friend you willing to practice by running 10 rounds of the volleyball court. after that strach your body for 15 to 20 minutes. Moreover that is initial part of the game. Now you need to understand the rules and rotation system in addition you need to feel that this is the game of 6 players.
Fhrthermore you can practice with the wall when you alone. And i would like to inform you that i m join with you.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses all three bullet points: recommending a sport (volleyball), explaining how to learn it, and suggesting learning it together. However, the response is under the 150-word minimum, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. The instructions for learning the sport are somewhat disjointed and lack sufficient detail to fully satisfy the task requirements. Because the response is under-length, it fails to provide the depth expected for a Band 6 or higher, resulting in a lower score for task achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter lacks clear paragraphing, which makes the flow of ideas feel rushed and somewhat disorganized. While there are some attempts at cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'Furthermore', they are used somewhat mechanically. The transition between the recommendation and the instructions is abrupt. To improve, you should organize your email into distinct paragraphs: one for the introduction, one for the recommendation and instructions, and one for the closing suggestion to join together.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for a basic email but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are several spelling errors, such as 'messgae' for 'message', 'reccomend' for 'recommend', 'staminar' for 'stamina', and 'strach' for 'stretch'. Additionally, the phrase 'attributable to height' is used incorrectly in this context. You should focus on using more natural collocations and ensuring correct spelling to improve your lexical score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the reader's understanding. Examples include 'moved in the same town where i lived' (should be 'to the same town where I live'), 'this sport need more staminar' (subject-verb agreement error), and 'i m join with you' (incorrect verb tense). There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the punctuation is inconsistent, particularly with the use of capital letters for 'I'. Focusing on basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement will help improve your accuracy.
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