Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email:

• recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn
• explain how your friend could learn this sport
• suggest that you both learn this sport together

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mike,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to give some suggestion about learning a new sport activities.A week before in university, you told me to provide some recommendation about learnig a new sport.

Last week, when you visited my house. I have noticed that your cricket skills was great but you need to improve a bit. So, I suggest to join training club on 2nd july.

I have seen one advertisment on television that world campion cricketer is coming in our town on 2nd july, to spread knowledge about cricket game. As far as I concern, we had conversation that you are seriously wanted to learn cricket. It is great opportunity to bulid your cricket knowledge from worlds best sport person.

I am planning to join you to learn cricket game. As I am going participate on cricket tournament at our university. Even we can do some practice of that game at my house. I have numerous tools for that game. So, it will be extremely for us. After practice we will enjoy refreshment at my house.

I look forward to receiveing your prompt response.

Your faithfully,

Piyush.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the task: recommending a sport (cricket), explaining how to learn it (attending the camp), and suggesting learning together. The tone is appropriate for an informal email to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of how to learn the sport relies heavily on a single event, and the suggestion to learn together is slightly repetitive. To reach a higher band, ensure that your ideas are expanded with more detail and that the flow of information feels more natural and less like a list of requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The email is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'As far as I concern' is an incorrect collocation, and the transition between the mention of the cricket camp and your personal plans to join is a bit abrupt. While the overall message is clear, the logical progression between sentences could be smoother. Using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition') would help improve the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to communicate your ideas, but there are several errors in word choice and collocation that occasionally hinder the naturalness of the text. Examples include 'give some suggestion' (should be 'suggestions'), 'world campion' (spelling: 'champion'), and 'extremely for us' (missing an adjective, e.g., 'extremely beneficial'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they indicate a need for more precise control over word forms and common English collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('cricket skills was great'), article usage ('seen one advertisment'), and tense consistency ('you are seriously wanted to learn'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing after periods. While you are able to convey your message, the frequency of these errors requires the reader to work harder to interpret your meaning. Focusing on proofreading for basic subject-verb and tense errors will significantly improve your score.

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