Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-07-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email:

• recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn
• explain how your friend could learn this sport
• suggest that you both learn this sport together

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

 

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Vivek,

Hello, how are you? I am doing good in my hometown. In the last conversation, you asked for my suggestion about seeking knowledge of a new recreational activity . Thus, here I am writing for the same.

From the day you have asked me, I am deeply thinking of the game to advice you which not only you like but also you can pursue a carrier playing it. Then, I suddenly remember the sport which I was watching in my childhood and you should surely learn to play which is hockey.

Furthermore, you can learn this sport by watching international tournaments on star sports channel on television. In addition, there is a famous YouTuber named Rony which shows how to play different regional sport & techniques to win it .

Moreover, I have been following this game from my childhood but never got chance to officially play. Thus, I am thinking to join local academy of hockey in the town when I will be there with you during our second term of the college. Attending a sport class together will be surely fun for us.

I hope you are fine. Lots of love to you & give my regards to your parents.

Your best friend,

Krishna.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You recommended hockey, explained how to learn it through television and YouTube, and proposed learning it together. The tone is appropriate for an email to a friend, and the purpose of the letter is clear throughout. To improve, ensure that your ideas are more fully developed; for instance, you could have elaborated on why hockey is a particularly good fit for your friend's interests or personality. Overall, you have fulfilled the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The email is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. You use cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'In addition', and 'Moreover' to link your ideas. However, some of these transitions feel slightly mechanical or repetitive in their placement. The paragraphing is appropriate for an informal letter. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that the progression of ideas flows more naturally between sentences rather than relying on standard transition markers at the start of every paragraph.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for this task, using terms like 'recreational activity', 'international tournaments', and 'officially'. There are some minor errors in word choice, such as 'seeking knowledge of' (which is unnatural in this context) and 'pursue a carrier' (which should be 'career'). While you attempt to use more specific vocabulary, some phrasing remains slightly awkward. To improve, focus on collocations—words that naturally go together—and ensure you are using vocabulary that fits the informal context of a letter to a friend.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'From the day you have asked me, I am deeply thinking' (should be present perfect continuous: 'have been thinking') and 'never got chance' (missing article: 'a chance'). Additionally, there are some punctuation and spacing issues, such as spaces before commas. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles to improve your accuracy.

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