Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email:

• recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn
• explain how your friend could learn this sport
• suggest that you both learn this sport together

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

 

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Mark,

I hope this email finds you well.

I have received your email the one you sent yesterday for the advice on the new sports option you can learn. As we are friends from so long you have mentioned me before that you never played volleyball but you are having too much interest in it. I would recommend you to learn this game.

There is gaming complex in the our town near the main bus stop, you can go there and enroll yourself in the volleyball game. I am recommending you to join this complex the trainer in this complex is a national champion, and other players are playing at the district level, so it would be good for you to learn it.

I also have keen interest to learn how to play volleyball, the classes they are having that 8PM everyday, if you have interest to learn this sport, please let me know, so i will join you.

I look forward for your response.

Your lovingly,

Shiv

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You recommended volleyball, explained how to learn it by joining a local complex, and suggested learning it together. The tone is appropriate for an email to a friend, and the purpose of the letter is clear throughout. To improve, you could provide slightly more detail in your explanations—for example, mentioning why you think volleyball is a good fit for your friend specifically, or adding a bit more enthusiasm to the suggestion of learning together. Overall, the response is well-structured and fulfills the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The email is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on one of the required points. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'I also' and 'so' to link your ideas. However, the flow between some sentences is slightly mechanical, and there are some minor issues with referencing, such as 'the one you sent yesterday' which feels a bit clunky. To reach a higher band, try to use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that your sentences transition more smoothly into one another. The paragraphing is appropriate and helps the reader follow your message easily.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for this task, using words like 'recommend', 'enroll', and 'keen interest'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'friends from so long' (should be 'friends for a long time') and 'having too much interest' (should be 'have a great interest'). While these errors do not impede communication, they do limit the precision of your writing. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and idiomatic expressions that are natural in an informal email context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'There is gaming complex in the our town' (missing article/extra pronoun) and 'the classes they are having that 8PM' (incorrect preposition and structure). Additionally, there are some punctuation slips, such as the comma splice in 'I also have keen interest to learn how to play volleyball, the classes they are having...'. While these errors are noticeable, they rarely cause confusion for the reader. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct preposition usage will help improve your accuracy.

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