Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email:

• recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn
• explain how your friend could learn this sport
• suggest that you both learn this sport together

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

 

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Zack,

I hope you are doing well and enjoying your stay here.

I am writing this email to suggest a new sport swimming.

Learning swimming in this hot weather is perfect sport. First of all, you can beat the heat wave by keeping your body temperture low by stsying in cool water bodies. In addition to this, there are many affordable camps are going in the summer, which we can take a part to learn this activity.

In summer camps, they have classes for different levels and you can start with beginners level and upgarde as you feel comfortable going into deep water. It is also a good workout that keep you healthy and in shape.

On the top of that I am also planning to learn how to swim. We both can pair up and take classes together to embrack on this new journey to learn something new and exciting. I would love to spend more time with you.

I look forward to hear from you and taking course together.

Best regards,

Ram

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You recommended swimming, explained how to learn it through summer camps, and invited your friend to join you. The tone is appropriate for an informal email to a friend. The ideas are relevant and clearly presented, though some development is slightly brief. For instance, while you mention the benefits of swimming, expanding slightly more on the social aspect of the classes could have strengthened the response. Overall, the task requirements are fully met with a clear and consistent purpose throughout the letter.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The email is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'First of all', 'In addition to this', and 'On the top of that' to link your ideas. While these are functional, the flow is sometimes slightly mechanical. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different points of the task. The progression of ideas is easy to follow, and the relationship between the recommendation and the suggestion to join together is clear. To reach a higher band, try to vary your linking phrases and ensure smoother transitions between sentences.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for this task, such as 'beat the heat wave', 'affordable', and 'embark on this new journey'. There are some minor errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'temperture' (temperature), 'stsying' (staying), 'upgarde' (upgrade), and 'embrack' (embark). Additionally, the phrase 'there are many affordable camps are going' is slightly awkward; a more natural phrasing would be 'there are many affordable camps available'. Despite these slips, the meaning is always clear, and the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your message effectively in an informal context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'I hope you are doing well and enjoying your stay here' and 'We both can pair up and take classes together to embark on this new journey'. There are several grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues like 'a good workout that keep you healthy' (should be 'keeps') and 'I look forward to hear from you' (should be 'hearing'). While these errors are noticeable, they do not impede communication. To improve, focus on verb forms after 'look forward to' and ensure consistent subject-verb agreement throughout your writing.

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