Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email:
- recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn
- explain how your friend could learn this sport
- suggest that you both learn this sport together
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ....................................,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Kishan,
Hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to gave you suggestion about suitable sport to learn here in Edmonton. As you know that Edmonton is well-known for the OILERS and the Ice hockey so I also recommended to learn this sport.
Moreover, if you really wanted to learn this sport there are so many locations are available that you can enhance your sports skill. Even you can also start coaching for this game nearby your recreational center and also you can participate in different game challenges that organized inside the West Edmonton Mall.
At last, I just want to tell you that if you are planning to start this sport I also wanted to learn this sport but I am looking for someone who came with me so that we can enjoyed the sports together and had a good company with each other. Looking for a response from your side.
Yours Faithfully,
Gautam.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
You have addressed all three bullet points of the prompt: you recommended ice hockey, explained how to learn it, and suggested learning it together. The tone is appropriate for an email to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of how to learn the sport is a bit vague, mentioning 'coaching' and 'challenges' without providing specific, helpful details that would make the advice more practical. To reach a higher band, ensure that your suggestions are fully extended with concrete examples or personal insights to show a deeper engagement with the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The email is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover' and 'At last' to transition between points. However, the use of these devices is occasionally mechanical or slightly unnatural. For example, 'At last' is not the most common way to introduce a final suggestion in a friendly letter; 'Finally' or 'One more thing' would be more natural. Additionally, the referencing within sentences is sometimes slightly unclear, which occasionally disrupts the flow of information.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey your message, such as 'recreational center' and 'well-known'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'gave you suggestion' (should be 'give you a suggestion') and 'participate in different game challenges that organized' (should be 'that are organized'). These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your writing. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and ensuring that your verb forms match the intended meaning.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, particularly with verb tenses and subject-verb agreement. Examples include 'I also recommended to learn' (should be 'I also recommend learning'), 'if you really wanted to learn' (should be 'if you really want to learn'), and 'we can enjoyed' (should be 'we can enjoy'). While these errors are noticeable, they rarely prevent the reader from understanding your meaning. Increasing your control over basic tense consistency will significantly improve your score.
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