Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email:

• recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn
• explain how your friend could learn this sport
• suggest that you both learn this sport together

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sonam

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this email to assist you regarding learning a new sport.

To begin with, I strongly recommend you to learn swimming. I personally feel that this sport will be really suitable for you because you are really fond of going to beaches, lakes and rivers. Apart from this swimming is more than a sport nowadays.

In addition it will boost your confidence. I would also suggest you to take swim classes for a month from Toronto swimming academy as one of my friend took from there and he is a perfect swimmer now.

Moreover they provide good packages at reasonable prices and even according yo your availability.

Even i can also join you because i am free from my college for a month. so that we both can learn together and have a quality time together. I am really excited to learn a new skill.

I hope for your positive response.

King Regards

Shubhangi goyal

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You recommended swimming, explained how to learn it by suggesting a specific academy, and proposed learning together. The tone is appropriate for an email to a friend. The ideas are relevant and clearly presented. To reach a higher band, you could expand slightly more on the benefits of the sport or the logistics of the classes to provide a more fully developed response. Overall, the task is completed effectively with a clear purpose throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The email is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Apart from this', 'In addition', and 'Moreover' to link your ideas. However, the paragraphing is a bit fragmented, and some transitions feel slightly mechanical. To improve, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single clear theme and use a wider variety of linking words to improve the flow between sentences. The progression of ideas is easy to follow, which is a strength.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'assist', 'reasonable prices', and 'availability'. There are some minor errors, such as 'swim classes' (should be 'swimming lessons') and 'according yo' (a typo). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, it is somewhat repetitive and lacks the more sophisticated or idiomatic expressions that would characterize a higher band. Focusing on more precise collocations and avoiding simple errors will help elevate your score in this area.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'I personally feel that this sport will be really suitable for you because...'. There are several grammatical slips, including 'one of my friend took' (should be 'friends'), 'Even i can also' (should be 'I can also'), and missing articles or punctuation. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Increasing your control over subject-verb agreement and sentence punctuation will significantly improve your accuracy.

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