Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email:

• recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn
• explain how your friend could learn this sport
• suggest that you both learn this sport together

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Hi Raman,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to advise you about the way in which you can learn about a new sport that will really beneficial for you .

Firstly, I really appriciate you to took my suggestion of learning a football. I think this sport would be suitable for you because it has numerous benefits like chance to be physically fit, learn about team work and many more.

Furthermore, if you want to be a good and professional football player , I think you will join the academy which will provide you serval exercises and services to enhance you sports skills. Moreover, I can also join you because I am on my vacations and have a lot of free time . Finally, I hope it will be a best time for us to be together and chance to make new memories.

your's lovely,

Jaskaran

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points of the task: recommending a sport (football), explaining how to learn it (joining an academy), and suggesting you learn it together. The tone is appropriate for an email to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, while you mention 'numerous benefits,' you only list two, and the explanation of how to learn the sport is quite brief. To reach a higher band, try to expand on your suggestions with more descriptive details or personal anecdotes to make the response feel more natural and fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The email is logically organized with a clear introduction, body, and closing. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Firstly,' 'Furthermore,' and 'Moreover' to link your ideas. However, the transition between the recommendation and the suggestion to join together feels a bit abrupt. Additionally, the paragraphing is slightly inconsistent, as the second and third paragraphs could be better balanced. To improve, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single clear idea and use a wider variety of linking words to create a smoother flow between sentences.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'physically fit,' 'professional,' and 'enhance.' However, there are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'really beneficial for you' (missing 'be'), 'appriciate you to took' (incorrect grammar/collocation), and 'serval' (spelling error). The vocabulary is generally functional but lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. Focusing on correct collocations—for example, saying 'I appreciate you taking my suggestion'—will significantly improve the quality of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'I am writing this letter to advise you about the way in which you can learn about a new sport that will really beneficial' (missing 'be'), 'learning a football' (incorrect article usage), and 'your's lovely' (incorrect sign-off). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they are frequent enough to impact the overall fluency. You should pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement, article usage, and basic sentence construction.

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