Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email:
- recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn
- explain how your friend could learn this sport
- suggest that you both learn this sport together
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ....................................,
Student answer (Band 6.5)
Dear Tanisha,
Hope you are doing well! I am writing to recommend you to learn kick boxing as a new sport during the summer.
As you are well-informed about everything what is happening around the world. In order to be prepared, a defence training is equally important in our lives. As a result, I do suggest you to build your core and strength by enrolling in this sport.
Furthermore, I know that you love challenges and exploring new skill every year. So, Kickboxing will ensure your safety as well improve the physical fitness within you. I know Don Mills community centre has introduced this programme therefore can register before it expires.
Additionally, I am also thrilled to register myself for this training. I am available on weekends in morning, so if your availability is similar then we can join together. Please let me know what are your thoughts about it.
Looking forward to hear from you.
Warm Regards,
Neelu Raghuwanshi
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You recommended kickboxing, explained how to learn it by mentioning the Don Mills community centre, and clearly suggested that you both join together. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend, and the purpose of the email is clear from the beginning. To reach a higher band, you could expand slightly more on the benefits of the sport or provide more specific details about the learning process, such as the duration of the course or the equipment needed, to fully develop your ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The email is logically organized with clear paragraphing. You use cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'Additionally', and 'As a result' to connect your ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the flow between sentences could be more natural. For instance, the sentence 'As you are well-informed about everything what is happening around the world' is a fragment and lacks a clear connection to the following sentence. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that every sentence is grammatically complete will help improve the flow and cohesion of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for this task, using terms like 'well-informed', 'enrolling', and 'thrilled'. There are some minor word choice issues, such as 'recommend you to learn' (should be 'recommend that you learn') and 'register myself' (should be 'sign up'). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your message clearly, it is somewhat basic. To improve, try to incorporate more precise collocations and idiomatic expressions suitable for an informal email to a friend, which would demonstrate a more flexible control of language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. For example, 'everything what is happening' should be 'everything that is happening', and 'Looking forward to hear from you' should be 'Looking forward to hearing from you'. Additionally, there are some punctuation and article usage issues (e.g., 'a defence training' should be 'self-defence training'). While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and gerund usage will help improve your accuracy.
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