Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email:

• recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn
• explain how your friend could learn this sport
• suggest that you both learn this sport together

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear friend

I hope this note find you well, i got your message related to learning new sport. That is very good idea to learn that makes our body fit. I like to play all type of sports but what i highly recommend is hockey which includes group of people playing together and targeting to aim the goal this also increase group managment ,communicating with other team member to win the race. you will love this sports as this include running from one place to other placing bowl till target.

In addition to playing alone is better enjoying with friends circule. i do have experience playing hockey in childhood so i can teach you how to play hockey, so this weekend we can plan playing together as i also know my childhhood friend who have continue playing. This will make our body fit and energeatic make aways from cell phone playing ps5 in the house this will always increse in good visuan

Best regards

simran

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all three bullet points: recommending a sport (hockey), explaining how to learn it, and suggesting you learn it together. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. The description of hockey is slightly confusing, as the rules mentioned (running from one place to another placing a bowl) do not accurately reflect the sport. While the tone is appropriate for an email to a friend, the content lacks the necessary detail to fully engage the reader. The purpose of the email is clear, but the explanation of how to learn the sport is quite brief and relies on the writer's personal experience rather than providing a structured plan.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The email is organised into two paragraphs, which is a reasonable structure. However, the logical flow between sentences is often disjointed. For example, the transition from discussing hockey to the suggestion of playing together is abrupt. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'In addition to', but they are sometimes used incorrectly or in a way that feels mechanical. The referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in the second paragraph where the connection between the writer's childhood experience and the current plan is a bit muddled. Paragraphing is present but could be more effectively used to separate the distinct points of the task.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'friends circule' instead of 'circle of friends' and 'make aways from cell phone' instead of 'stay away from'. The word choice is often repetitive and basic. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of control over collocations and the presence of spelling errors (e.g., 'visuan', 'energeatic') limit the score. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more natural collocations and ensuring that your vocabulary is used accurately in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('I hope this note find you well'), missing articles, and incorrect punctuation. Many sentences are run-on or lack proper conjunctions, such as 'I do have experience playing hockey in childhood so i can teach you how to play hockey, so this weekend we can plan playing together'. The frequent errors in basic grammar and sentence construction suggest that the writer struggles with maintaining accuracy when attempting more complex thoughts.

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