Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email:

• recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn
• explain how your friend could learn this sport
• suggest that you both learn this sport together

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Dear melina.

The new sport learning near by Shanti nagar . A new sport that would be suitable for you . After school we should practic and then go go home after complete. What you think about badminton racket it's a very easy sport learning and playing both of thing the same away. It's growth you strange may we should start or You don't need any dissstoiuse we both learn this sport together we practice a badminton racket in afternoon it's a very take your parents guidance and the decide . Thank you you dear friend Bella.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 97 words. While you attempted to address the three bullet points—recommending badminton, suggesting how to learn, and proposing to play together—the ideas are severely underdeveloped and lack the necessary detail to fully satisfy the task. The content is fragmented, making it difficult for the reader to follow your advice or understand the context of the suggestion. To improve, you must expand on each point with full sentences and provide more descriptive information to meet the length requirement and demonstrate a clearer purpose.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The letter lacks a logical structure and clear paragraphing. The ideas are presented in a disjointed manner, and there is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences together. For example, the transition between recommending the sport and suggesting how to learn it is abrupt and confusing. The use of referencing is also unclear, making it difficult to follow the progression of your argument. To improve, you should organize your response into clear paragraphs: one for the recommendation, one for the learning method, and one for the invitation to join you, using linking words like 'furthermore' or 'consequently' to connect your thoughts.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

Your vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate, which frequently impedes communication. Phrases like 'both of thing the same away' and 'growth you strange' are unclear and do not convey the intended meaning. You rely on basic, repetitive words and struggle to use appropriate collocations for the context of sports or advice. To improve, focus on learning common phrases related to hobbies and suggestions, and ensure you are using words that accurately reflect your intended message rather than literal translations that do not fit the context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that make the text difficult to understand. There are significant issues with sentence structure, verb tense, and word order, such as 'The new sport learning near by Shanti nagar' and 'we should practic'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of periods and capitalization. You are currently limited to very simple sentence structures, and even these contain errors that distort the meaning. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and correct punctuation before attempting more complex structures.

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