Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email:

• recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn
• explain how your friend could learn this sport
• suggest that you both learn this sport together

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

hello bridget,

i hope you will be fine with radiant healht.

I am writing about that you asked to me about learning for new sport.

To maintain your health and personality it is necessary you should be paly a game.

it has many benefits about health.

when you become a Athlete you could be imagine that take the decision for football playing was not wrong

Well i would like to say you that foot ball is the best game for you.

i know a captain of a football team, i will send you his number.after call you must approach to him.he will tell you all the rules about game.and one thing is important that play ground is between your and my home

So i think we both should be join the football team.

if you agree with it will be very helpful for learning game for us.

I look forward to hearing you.

yours faithfully

ABBAS

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: recommending a sport (football), explaining how to learn it (contacting a captain), and suggesting you learn together. However, the development of these ideas is quite limited. The tone is somewhat inconsistent for an email to a friend, and the explanation of how to learn the sport is brief. To improve, you should expand on your ideas with more detail, such as why football is specifically suitable for your friend or what the training sessions might involve. The closing 'yours faithfully' is also inappropriate for a friend; 'Best wishes' or 'See you soon' would be much more suitable for this informal task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The email is organised into short, somewhat disjointed sentences. While the progression of ideas is logical, the use of cohesive devices is very limited. You rely on simple transitions like 'Well' or 'So', which makes the flow feel mechanical. Paragraphing is also missing; the text is presented as a single block, which hinders readability. To reach a higher band, you should use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition') and group your ideas into clear paragraphs to help the reader follow your argument more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits your ability to express ideas with precision. There are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'radiant healht' (radiant health) and 'paly a game' (play a sport). You also use 'Athlete' incorrectly in this context. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of variety and the frequent spelling errors (e.g., 'foot ball', 'ground') prevent you from demonstrating a higher level of lexical control. Focusing on learning common collocations related to sports and improving your spelling will significantly boost your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('you should be paly'), article usage ('the decision for football playing'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are simple, and attempts at more complex structures often result in errors, such as 'if you agree with it will be very helpful'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and incorrect capitalization. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms.

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