Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email:

• recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn
• explain how your friend could learn this sport
• suggest that you both learn this sport together

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Pushti,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing to offer a advice about learning a new sport.

There are variety of sports learning centers available in our city. But , here I would like to recommend to join swimming classes. As a swimming is most essential skill that everyone should learn about it.

Apart from that, swimming is also the best type of physical exercise that helps humans to maintain healthy lifestyle. I have a few references that help you to learn about the swimming. First of all , there is a new recreational park has opened last month near by my residence. It offers a 6 month course for just 125 dollar and I think it is more reasonable than others.

I have visit this center just last Monday and I found discount for early bookings. So I decided to learn this new skill with you if you are ready to learn swimming and it will be more fun when we both learn this sport together.

I am waiting for your reply. please let me inform your decision.

Best Regards,

Dipali Rabari

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You recommended swimming, explained how to learn it by mentioning the new recreational park and its course, and suggested learning it together. The tone is appropriate for an email to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat basic. For instance, while you mention the cost, providing more specific details about the benefits or the atmosphere of the center would have strengthened the response. Overall, the task requirements are fully met, and the purpose of the email is clear throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The email is logically organized with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Apart from that', 'First of all', and 'So'. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical, and the paragraphing could be improved for better flow. For example, the second paragraph is quite dense and could be split to separate the recommendation from the logistical details. Referencing is generally clear, though some sentences, such as 'I have a few references that help you to learn about the swimming', are slightly awkward in their connection to the following sentences.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'recreational park', 'essential skill', and 'early bookings'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'offer a advice' (should be 'offer some advice') and 'I have visit' (should be 'I visited'). Additionally, the phrase 'let me inform your decision' is unnatural; 'let me know your decision' would be more idiomatic. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, it lacks the flexibility and precision required for a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include 'There are variety of sports' (missing article), 'As a swimming is most essential skill' (incorrect article usage), and 'there is a new recreational park has opened' (incorrect verb tense/structure). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the placement of commas before periods. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and article usage will help improve your accuracy.

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