Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email:
- recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn
- explain how your friend could learn this sport
- suggest that you both learn this sport together
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ....................................,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Dear Romil
Hi, Good to See You Here Romil I Have To Tell You About My New Adventure, Don't Be confuse. I Explain You All , me And My Brother Would be Start Our New Sport The Name is MMA, I Would be Like To Join you With us for MMA, It was Very Tuff Game Just Adventured and Hard an Very Tuff Workout , so I hope u like to join with us.
MMA was learning to very Easy to as I See But Onestly Spiking it Was very Tuff Game in the World . MMA Actully Form About the Mix Marshal Art Hard an Very Mind Contious Game . This Game need Hard Work Regular Precties and More Time About your life.
I am Thinking About This Game . We Should be learn to Get Training to Both of us. And One More Thing You Should Be Happy to learning this Adventure Activity .
Just Think About Ans Too Me as soon as Possiable
Yours Faithfully
Chirag
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
You have addressed all three bullet points: recommending a sport (MMA), explaining how to learn it, and suggesting you learn it together. However, the development of these ideas is quite limited. The explanation of how to learn the sport is vague, simply stating 'we should be learn to get training', which lacks detail. Additionally, the tone is inconsistent for an email to a friend, and the content is somewhat repetitive. To improve, you should provide more specific details about the training process, such as joining a local gym or finding a coach, and ensure the tone is more natural and conversational.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The letter is divided into paragraphs, which helps the overall structure. However, the logical progression of ideas is often hindered by poor sentence construction and a lack of cohesive devices. Transitions between sentences are frequently missing or awkward, such as the jump from 'I explain you all' to 'me and my brother'. The use of referencing is also unclear at times, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. To improve, focus on using linking words like 'furthermore', 'for instance', or 'consequently' to connect your ideas more smoothly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic words like 'tuff' (tough) and 'game' to describe MMA, which is not the most accurate collocation. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'confuse' instead of 'confused', 'Onestly Spiking' instead of 'honestly speaking', and 'Precties' instead of 'practice'. These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to sports and training, and pay closer attention to spelling and word forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that affect readability. These include subject-verb agreement issues ('me and my brother would be start'), incorrect verb tenses ('MMA was learning to very Easy'), and misuse of articles and prepositions. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of capital letters in the middle of sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, subject-verb agreement, and consistent verb tense usage before attempting more complex grammatical forms.
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