Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email:
- recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn
- explain how your friend could learn this sport
- suggest that you both learn this sport together
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ....................................,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear John,
Hope my letter finds in good health. I got your letter last week and I am glad to hear that you are interested to learn a new sport, and need my advise on it.
As I know you are very energetic and hardworking which are most important thing to achieve any target. There is not doubt any sport such as basketball, football or baseball you can play any. However, I think ice hockey is suitable for you for some reasons. Primarily, you are a excellent skater, which is a positive point and also your height is great and Ice Hockey is Canada's National Sport, so you can represent your country in future.
There are numerous sports academy in Ontario, which are giving trainings to individual, where as Gore Sport Academy is one of the best and have had many great reviews. I was also thinking to join you, as I want to learn skating from the long time. Moreover, I was a good player of Hockey in my India, thus I already familiar with it. I believe you will love my suggestion. I think we will start the classes in coming summer vacations.
Hope to hear from you soon.
Yours truly,
Dean.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response successfully addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You recommend ice hockey, explain how to learn it by mentioning sports academies, and suggest learning it together. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited; for instance, the explanation of how to learn the sport could be more detailed by mentioning specific steps or resources beyond just naming an academy. The response is clearly focused and maintains a consistent purpose throughout, meeting the requirements for a Band 6.0 performance.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The email is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'However', 'Primarily', and 'Moreover' to link sentences. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical or slightly misused, such as 'where as' (which should be 'whereas') and the transition between the recommendation and the academy suggestion. The referencing is generally clear, but the flow between sentences could be smoother to achieve a higher band. Overall, the structure is coherent and the progression of ideas is logical.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'energetic', 'hardworking', and 'represent'. There are some noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'need my advise' (should be 'advice'), 'I already familiar with it' (missing 'am'), and 'from the long time' (should be 'for a long time'). While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precision in word usage. To reach a higher band, focus on using more natural collocations and ensuring correct word forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'As I know you are very energetic...' and 'There are numerous sports academy in Ontario, which are giving trainings...'. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement ('There are numerous sports academy' should be 'academies'), missing articles ('in India' instead of 'in my India'), and tense inconsistencies ('I was a good player... thus I already familiar'). While these errors are noticeable, they rarely prevent the reader from understanding your message. Increasing the accuracy of your complex sentences will help improve this score.
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